She called me “Mr. Grimm”.
My Angel,
my light,
the bleed from mortal sin.
She cried for me,
but all I could do
was watch.
They took their time,
Each smiling death.
Taking a piece of her
till her final breath.
Soaked in blood and raging lust;
her eyes went dull
and she was put to rest.
I cried,
oh Lord I cried to you,
but like a whisper in the wind.
No one could hear.
The laughed in their
beer tainted mentality.
All I did was watch.
They didn’t stop there,
Their lust, anew had arisen.
They used her body,
every inch for their own bliss.
I plead for you oh lord,
please let this end.
But once again, nothing.
Anger built as
I could take no more,
A fire burn inside,
A hell’s fury.
I waited till my
skin tensed from rage.
Till the fear in my ear vanished.
They laughed,
They pissed,
They drank,
they fucked all over her.
Undoing the ropes
the bounded me and
the soul that restricted me.
I took them both
and with my bare flesh,
beat them
without mercy.
Oh, I laughed
and laughed,
as they called out God’s name.
I knew no one would answer,
only they could feel their pain.
I ripped flesh
and broke bone.
When my body tired
my anger took over.
Images of her fuel me.
Her smile taken,
Her warmth frozen.
I beat them for joyously
seemed like an eternity.
I smiled,
she couldn’t see
what I had become.
I smiled bloody,
till even a blind man
could tell they were dead.
Bits of flesh, hung from my hands.
I had taken everything from them,
but still I held an emptiness.
There was almost no joy in what I had done.
I buried my Angel,
under her favorite tree.
Cried my last,
and left her to rest in peace.
I had become something new;
something strange
from the experience.
She called me “Mr. Grimm”.
As other will learn
all in their
due time.
Author notes
i don't know where this came from or how it took a life of it's own, i think i could do better, but this is all i got so far. i know it is not that good. but thanks for reading it.
A contest entry
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Seriously violent but that works sometimes
you got a green out of it
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Wow I think it's great! I really got wrapped up in the story and it almost played out in my mind. Revenge on those who have taken what is not there's! Wicked write!
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breath taking... i loved it. reading it i feel like i become Mr. Grimm, and if you don't win, there must be money involved.lol
one thing i saw, in the line "under he favorite tree", she in the place of he.
great write and you don't need my luck.
KNIGHT TIME -
this is AWESOME
i loved this write..
GREAT JOB
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This is very good! When writing something like this it can easily take on a life of its own and snowball. You steadily built up a dark morbid picture, that starts powerfully sad then bleeds into wrath and revenge with no limits on the fury. Amazing the power of some anger! I also loved the raw imagery presented here. A wicked write! Thanks for entering hunni, pleased to see you back with your quill! Good luck
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you know i'd say you a seat.lol
good luck on the contest.
KNIGHT TIME
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