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Last Will...


(This came from the Pub...only the line-breaks have been added)



God can't take away free will;
God didn't GIVE us free will.

Free will is ours because (and if) we exercise it.

Sole measure...if we exercise it.

I once worshipped a god.
I was told that this god
gave me free will;
I made a choice to cease to worship that god,
and thereby exercised that free will...
and it didn't get taken away.

I also was once told
that I had a duty, and that my free will
was subordinated to that duty;
I chose to fulfill that duty.

I could have chosen to do otherwise
(and face the consequenses...
there is always a choice
if you are willing to face the alternative)
but I CHOSE to fulfill that duty,
and I choose
to consider it my duty,
still.


My free will.

I made a vow to my wife;
only my love and my choice,
my free will,
holds me to that vow.

***

I'm dying, you know.

This is not news, and no surprise
tragic announcement;
you're dying, too.

If you're alive, you're dying.
No exceptions.
I'm not saying I'm dying soon...but then,
I don't know
(and neither do you, right?)

It's customary, when dying, to leave a will.

I choose, instead, to KEEP my will,
and that is my bequest
to those I will one day leave behind...

my will.

That I will continue
to exercise that will,
and show those to come after me
that they also have that will,
and will have it
for so long,
and ONLY for so long
as they exercise it.

Consider that
my Last Will...and Testament.

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  • Purrsanthema
    February 4

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    The use of repetition is fascinating, lending an extreme strength to the argument of the poem. The tone of voice is natural and unforced, yet powerful in it's colloquial verve.


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    October 19, 2008
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    exceptional writing...there's a lot of truth woven into this piece. Well done.
    Rory


  • faith-in-all
    October 6, 2008

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    "I'm dying, you know."

    I'm still recovering from that line! Way to stop my heart in my chest...luckily I was able to keep reading and so, I can tell you that I really liked how you worked this. It was kinda like a theme, but also full circle-esque...I don't know. I liked it. There.


  • heinzs silver member
    October 4, 2008
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    Works well as free verse. I like the message as well.


    • dericlee
      October 5, 2008
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      Thanks, Heinzs. I'd have brought your stars up to five, but the board didn't give me any to increase for you.


  • skitza
    October 4, 2008
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    I ain't seen that.


    • dericlee
      October 5, 2008
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      I think it's somewhere very close to the end of the 'Exposing Christianity' thread, Skitz.

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