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The man with half a face
stares out at the steep hills
a ghost town jewelled with the lights of shanties
tin trailers perched on limestone outcrops
listening to droning swamp coolers
as the hospital sleeps
a last refuge of the poor, the illegal
and the dispossessed
lost inside the faint, silvery trills of Mexican trumpets
that float across the vast, dark, desert emptiness
like spectres that frequent the night

Steering his Cadillac like a hastily rolled joint
into a concrete ditch
crash-landing on farmhouse steps
assuring his own destruction -
(arm, leg, ribs, vertebrae, lungs and spleen
jaw reconstructed with wire and chewing gum)
joints grinding
stealing extra pillows
gazes with watery eyes from his bed by the window
half obscured by orange fallout
dump trucks with wheels like hot tubs
shifting dirt and slag, licking up plumes of dust
all day long, the screech and rattle
machinery rising from old smelter
forming mountains, curved and sloped
impossibly high, like giant sand dunes
and beyond, strip mines
gargantuan whirlpools
sucking down into the earth
like an ever-shifting puzzle
questions, questions, always questions –

why

don't I remember dying?
...and yet, I am dead


















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©crisstiena

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  • zt
    October 8, 2008

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    tomb robbers face down in the dust
    strip mine a xeric landscape
    while the foreman's forman's foreman
    steals their souls
    he smelts them down into solid ingots
    pigs to be sold to the highest bidder
    while ghosts of lives unlived
    toil forever in a sea of fire
    life in the necropolis...

    You paint a dramatic scene here. Your descriptions are always so vivid. Good stuff!


  • JazzALTernative silver member
    October 5, 2008
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    Like walking through a dream - associative and building within itself.


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 4, 2008

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    Magnificent, of course, considering the source. Egad, ya nearly made me rhyme. Good luck in the contest, my dear Friend.

    P.S.
    When I worked at the college library, we had a sign on the reference desk. "Answers, $1.00. Correct answers, $2.00. Dumb looks are free."

    P.S.S.
    "forming mountains, curved and sloped
    impossibly high, like giant sand dunes"

    These were my favorite lines. Your descriptions of something so somber, so dark, are unequalled.


    • crisstiena
      October 4, 2008
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      I love the wry library humor! I might have to borrow that one

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