We have no purpose
We lie alone and helpless
Tomorrow never comes
Stuck in today
No way to worry our troubles away
Crushed by despondency
We all reek of heartbreak
Losing, lurching, breaking, crushed.
We wait for something.
Anything. To take us far away
But the day never comes -- we're stuck.
Stuck in forever.
Lost in a circle that doesn't end.
The past will repeat itself doomed to attend
Lost in tomorrow stuck in today
Damned to always remain that way
Puzzling futures elude all sense of time
Unspoken thoughts and unspoken rhymes
Wandering aimlessly through white rooms
Pondering the sense of a pivotal doom
Careless words said but nobody hears
All busy confirming the worst of our fears
Sitting in circles of sadness and sorrow
Aching for the day to turn to tomorrow
Stuck in today with no one to help us
Can't make it stop.
Somebody save us.
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hi!!!!!!!!!
the beginning of this poem is excellent. it really draws you in to read the rest of it!!!! i think thats one of the things to a great poem, an incredibly eye catching title!!!!!
also, your background!!!!!!
it is AMAZING!!!! i love the colour purple.
the first line is awesome too. i really think like that too. im glad to see someone else shares my life view LOL!
i also love the last two lines. it makes you think a lot and draws questions in your mind. it definitel did this to me!!!!!
so well done overall, have nothing much to suggest that you improve on.
keep writing, you are extremely talented and filling the world with thought provoking literature -
In the dominon of purgatory, there all no days, just endless eternities of oblivion to replay over and over the crushed dreams of what we wished to be and all the reasons why they cannot be so.
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First of all, I think 'we lie alone and helpless ' could be it's own line. Other than that one formatting thing however, I think this poem really serves as a good look at society today, with all it's many flaws. There is so much sadness in this world, so many people getting bogged down with emotional baggage, that sometimes all we want is to escape to somewhere or to have someone make it all stop and go away. This poem is a lot about depression, and how it effects a person and their look at their surroundings. Very well done
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Thought provoking with a trace of deep sorrow. The emotion gripping lines are wrapped in good rhythm and rhyme. The poem has a sort of 'lost in the world' feel to it where the desperation floats from "stuck in today" to "stuck in forever".
Good write!
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i like this, you explain how we are in the "right now" we can never get out of right now...try getting out of fight now, right now. you cant!
lol
nice vocab and rhymes.
thanks for sharing !
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Wow!
Utterky speechless! That was a very intense thought provoking poem. It gave me lots to think about, well worded with good ryhme. I don't have much else to say as I'm so blown away. Great work.
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Excellent
Wow, a dark write, however, very well written. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this with us. -
An eerily sorrowful write. Nice job!
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