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Hey Kid, I Think I Love You

Hey kid,
I think I love you
I'm almost positively sure
But can you clarify?
Could you possibly describe this feeling in my heart?
Because I definitely can't
It's impossible
              indescribable
                          and so incredible

I've forgotten how to breathe
How to survive alone, like I use to
And that love wasn't always real
(Outside of Cinderella)

Hey stranger,
I hardly know you
Yet you're the beating of my heart
                                    and the silence....

You make me lose my place
                                my mind
                                          my sanity
And I love it

I stumble blindly through the halls
Forgetting everything around me
And my eyes close to all but your face

Hey kid,
Can't you see you're all I dream about?
You're my hope
            the glimmer in my eyes
                                  and the smile on my face

I can't even tell you the color of your eyes
I just get so lost in them
And my mind forgets to remember

Even putting the feelings on paper can't relieve what I'm feeling
So I think I love you
                  Can the feeling be mutual?

Author notes

Eyes Wide Shut

I wrote most of this last night at 12pm, and the rest this morning.
It's about a guy I met named Evan, he's amazing...
We're not even friends yet, but as soon as Fall Break ends I'm planning on changing that.
Normally I would try to avoid my crush, but it feels so much different this time. I don't know if I can stay away from him...

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Comments

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  • Kathraina silver member
    April 15
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    Oh wow, marvelous write.
    Great emotion invoked here.
    Bravo!!!



    ♥ Kate


  • Umi Juvariel
    April 9

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    Interesting poem here. I read the one that comes after it first, so it was interesting to read this one. Excellent write and good luck in my contest. You are a finalist.


  • BreakingTheSurface
    March 28

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    For some reason, the 'Hey kid, I think I love you' kind of makes me think of some girl running up to a guy, tackling him to the ground and kissing him, and running away.

    Maybe I'm weird like that?


  • melanizer
    October 14, 2008
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    i love this poem chick!!!
    ur awesome!
    -melanie moore


  • Xianaria gold member
    October 8, 2008
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    Thank you for entering~
    Very nicely done, I enjoyed this read!
    Best wishes~
    Tim

  • Francis Vincent
    October 6, 2008
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    "....Hey kid,
    Can't you see you're all I dream about?
    You're my hope
    the glimmer in my eyes
    and the smile on my face."
    is something going on i don't know about?
    I AM THE ORIGINAL 'the kid'

    i love the format,
    the intenseness of a love at first sight
    you are in for an adventure
    "i'm right behind you, indiana"


  • pyarkavaada
    October 5, 2008

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    This is an amazingly cute poem. I really enjoy the part that says "the glimmer in my eyes". Its wonderful. Hope it goes well.

    • TortureKitty
      October 6, 2008
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      Thank you, I hope so too.
      I actually just started talking to him the other day, and it's been pretty good so far.

  • Still Gonna Shine
    October 5, 2008
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    I really like this. I always forget what it's like to feel like this.


  • Dancing Alone
    October 5, 2008
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    *huge grin*

    this was written for me right? lol, im just kidding, but that is what it seems like. and its hard to get down exactly how you feel becuase you dont even know quie what it is...its almost annoying, not being able to put it in words
    but somehow we seem to manage.
    good job


    • TortureKitty
      October 6, 2008
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      Yeah, I know what you mean. This is the first love poem I've written that hasn't failed miserably.


  • Janetheplain
    October 5, 2008
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    This is so cute and magical. I love these words. Jane


  • Eyes Wide Shut gold member
    October 4, 2008

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    Oh, wow. This is really well put together and I love the way you describe it. It's almost like your talking, not writing. :] I like it.

  • Cwm
    October 4, 2008
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    Really sweet... hope it works out

  • Kabs
    October 4, 2008

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    Aww, that's actually really cute, not to mention that the emotion is well portrayed with the good choice of words. Well done and good luck with that.


    • TortureKitty
      October 4, 2008
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      Thanks
      I think you're the first one to read it.

      • Kabs
        October 4, 2008
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        Then I'm proud to say I'm the first to read this because it's that good of a poem.

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