Rain,
came as a train,
it hit the brain,
made it go dizzy,
in swell refrain,
I forgot my pains,
as drops slithered down my window panes,
loved it pouring,
my spirits went soaring,
do you care,
about rains,
I do,
very intensely,
and real heartily,
as it keeps pouring
A contest entry
- here comes the rain again by Dienush.
500 points, ended October 23, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow. Such immense emotion shown for the most beautiful of mother earths patterns. I, too, love the rain, I draw alot of power from storms, because I can connect with them very deeply. Often when I have had a bad day, I have noticed that the patterns in weather are shifted to match that of my emotions. Though, I never could cause it to rain at will, that would take great power and concentration. Nonetheless, I feel connected with nature and it is amazing. Absolutely beautiful write here...bravo..
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I to, love rain...this is a reflection of how we all feel about it and you wrote it so well
this answered why rain rhymes with pain...
Anna Lee
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I to am a lover of the rain. So refrshing and cooling at times poet. Thanks for the reminder. And also thanks for stopping by and commenting on my poem.
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The punctuation made this painful for me to read. Otherwise I really loved your poem. The imagery is good, the relationship between concepts and images, the light rhyming patterns. Nicely done. Thanks for your entry.
~Diana
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