Oh God
If I am overlooking you, then
my eyes are not influential for this sin
since, I have casual and mediocre eyes
it cannot visualize the unusual
that is you
please show mercy to my eyes
for displaying unconcern
evaluating apology as my
humble submission
Oh God...
A contest entry
- Act , act in the living present-- by Purush.
450 points, ended October 5, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Such a deep and heartfelt piece that shows the failings of human beings, yet the power of God to restore us. "evaluating apology as my
humble submission" excellent two lines and the most touching part of the poem. Very well done!
Lily ♥
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This was so very beautiful. You did a fantastic job with this lovely work of art you have penned here. God bless you always in all that you do and write and congratulations on winning gold for this. It most certainly deserved it. I hope you keep that ink flowing and inspiration blossoming and never let it run dry. Keep it up.
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very beautifully written
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I love your poems.
since, I have casual and mediocre eyes
it cannot visualize the unusual
that is you
beautiful and sincere. Humble and pleading. priceless!
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Amazing
I enter your contests all the time and decided to check your profile and read some of your work. I AM amazed at your talent. You show such insight, compassion, and emotional depth. I am honored to have won any of your contests. Yours with regards,Gypsy
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Wonderfully penned. There is much humility and reverence in this piece. A well-deserved win for a humble poet. Thanks for sharing.
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Wonderful, full of greatness penned...congrats on the Gold, but most on the write itself
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Just Beautiful
Wow yes Lord please remove the paradigms from my eyes so that I can see right to my very heart and soul of sin. Oh just a beautiful prayer poem I call them. The imagery is great with deep wisdom and meaning as well as the flow. Thank you so much for sharing your gift to write poetry with me. Oh very deserving of the gold as well!!
Wishing You Many Blessings
Much Love,
Kelle Marie
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Reverential
Envious I am / of your seeking /
Pathetic I am / thinking only of ME
SA-lute!
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Mercy cries out in humility here..and in so doing, you have shown a heart that is humble...Deserving of the Gold!
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Your humbleness in your belief is notable in this piece. If we look closely around us, we can see God. Food for thought on how I perceive life at the moment. Many thanks for your contribution and sharing with me.
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As I read your poems about God it gives me a
feeling of hope that there is always someone up
there. Congratulations on your gold..take care.
. Rewarded 4
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Dear प्रभुदयाल खट्टर
my congratulations on your gold. It is a blessing to read your words - they echo humility. Frans
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This works on many levels, I must evaluate how I myself have been seeing things of late...
Thank you
Peace be with you
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Congratulations on your Gold trophy...The lines and theme of this free verse are very original...from the heart, which makes pure motives asking forgiveness a rare find and beautiful..Bravo for the write!
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May His grace bestow higher eyes upon our souls that we may see His true wonder and magnificence. Powerfully written.
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So perfect for the prompt! Unusual choices of words, powerful and thought-provoking. I leave this reading with my mind alight. Thank you.
. Rewarded 4
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you never cease to amaze me...
your writing is really something that I would always love to read...
spiritually true, and the way you flowed the words into such a composition, I was entranced that I could see it clearly as a highly-valued piece of art.
. Rewarded 4
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this is well written and very understandable
well done
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congradulations my friend
Forgiveness, to start our day asking for forgiveness, and believing that we are forgiven. IT IS THE NOT BELIEVING THAT CREATES CONFLICT.
(ASK AND YOU SHALL RECIEVE)
your unique style and passion is refreshing and quite lovely, a pleasure to read
God bless you my friend....
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Ah ... the humble sees its incomplete ...
and unworthy perspectives ... and kneels before the Ever-Supreme in remorse ...
You deserve each sparkle of this Gold. Congratulations, Master Poet.
Love
Myra
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It's no wonder to see gold on this site. congratulations. You use some incredible words. Maybe they are common but nowadays most of people forgot how to use. Great.
~Sonja~
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since, I have casual and mediocre eyes
it cannot visualize the unusual
that is you
You again amaze me by finding a very unique write to an ordinary picture. I liked these lines the most, they were very simple and true and easy.
Thanks for such great writes that full the heart with faith and joy!
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A VERSE WITH deep thoughts
please show mercy to my eyes
for displaying unconcern
evaluating apology as my
humble act in the living present of mine
Oh God..."
All the best in my contest
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