The rough rain falls hard
on the unfriendly sidewalk
pain and I
have another heart to heart talk
these empty streets
harbor nothing but hate
we were supposed to meet
but I was a little late
my faded, felt hat
lacks style and grace
and the relentless rainfall
pelts my face
my heart aches
I can't remember my name
your memory overtakes me
so does my shame
I'm sorry
A contest entry
- here comes the rain again by Dienush.
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emotion filled and with feelings...
Thanks for participation.
Good luck,
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Wow. Loved the imagery. I also liked the "Rain falls hard on the unfriendly sidewalk" verse. A new favourite of mine.
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I'm flattered. Thank you.
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"Rain falls hard
on the unfriendly sidewalk
pain and I
have another heart to heart talk"
- This stanza is very good.
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Thank you. I'm glad that you liked it.
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I love the "unfriendly sidewalk" image. This is a creative take on the prompt, though it happens so often... and in the rain, too! Thanks for your entry.
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Thank you.
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