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a pixel in the bigger picture

Missing image

 
 

each chronon

discrete

 

a pixel

in the bigger picture

 

is the mon

of the watchmaker

 

the seal

upon the law

 
 
 
 

Author notes

Prompt: Moments In Time

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  • Errant Panther gold member
    October 5, 2008

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    definitely original and out of the box as far as the prompt is concerned, a little abstract perhaps but a very enjoyable read that evokes thought. well done.


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      October 5, 2008
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      Thanks. I kinda wanted to go in a different direction from everyone else.


  • Amera gold member
    October 5, 2008
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    You are brilliant

    Love,
    Amera♥

  • chordphrute
    October 4, 2008
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    well aren't you clever


  • Ceridwens Soul silver member
    October 4, 2008
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    pointillism in words... awesome!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 4, 2008

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    But is he blind?

    Superb stuff!



    NB.NBB.NHBB.NHBBAA.Y


  • notorious gold member
    October 4, 2008
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    I adore your title, even though I generally have distaste for titles that can be found in the poem.

    It makes me imagine a pixel in the bigger picture...

    Love the way you have incorporated 'watchmaker'--friggin' innovative much?!!!

    As for the seal...
    I can take it you're not talking about the furry baby seals in the Arctic--LoL.

    Yeah, those last 2 lines have some nice (political? ) impact.

    !

    Jessica

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      October 4, 2008

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      I have a distaste for titles which are the first or last lines of poems (I break the rule often); for me it is only governed by the question "will these words make a good title in themselves" - if the answer is "yes", then I say "What the frilly heck..." and used them.

      Seal - as in... well... monogram, like the seal of a US college you're not supposed to walk on, like a trademark, like a Japanese "mon", like an emblem.

      The last two lines are really supposed to refer to natural law, the laws of science, the laws of the universe, which the poem is attempting to visualise in digital form - hence chronons, the putative smallest discrete quantum of time - I guess I should have included the prompt in my notes, so I'll go back and do a quick edit.

      Thanks, Jessica.

      • notorious gold member
        October 4, 2008

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        I guess I should be uber to the flattered

        since you keep using phrases I put in my pocket for everyday use (e.g. "What the frilly heck" !)

        Seriously, when I first read your reply, I thought I'D written it for a moment.

        Oh yeah, I knew you weren't talking about Arctic seals.
        I just had to mention them, because baby harp seals are damn adorable!! I want one to float in my bathtub (I have shared this idea with quite a few people, and they have all gone and )

        De nada

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