romeo and juliet?
they've got nothing on us, babe
their iambic pentameter, rhymes,
and window-calling, devotion-promising speeches...
they'll never compare
to our letters
our whispers into the phone
our quiet vows of love
spoken in the small hours of the morning
it's such a shame.
oh, what a tragedy.
you see,
we're star-crossed too. fated.
to be together as long as we shall live.
what would romeo have done though:
if dear juliet didn't appear on the balcony?
if she'd taken the insidious dosage earlier;
closing her eyes, slowing her heart?
would he have climbed to her room,
softly calling her name,
only to find his beloved taken by death unfeigned?
what if no poison could bring him comfort,
for in one cold hand,
she clasped a note simply asking him to live?
what would he do?
what would you?
Author notes
option #3
just some thoughts.
A contest entry
- Romeo and Juliet Contest by misshugglebugglez.
626 points, ended November 23, 2008, 15 entries
Silver trophy winner
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i thought this was wonderful! you really express the great love that you have for this person. i love how you compare it to romeo and juliet's love... it reminded me of a child comparing two things together (like if they said "my cookie is bigger than yours!") okay that was a bad example but hopefully you get the point that i really liked how you wrote it the way you wrote it. it was fantabulous! i also really enjoy the ending's last two questions. this was a totally awesome poem. thanks for entering! =)
-adria/ confuzzled angel
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this stings.
very well done, though.
i like. this.
todays just a day where everything seems to be referring to shakespeare.
how odd.
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Thank You For Entering
Roflmao @ the unique idea through out this poem. the ever long question what if Juliet was not there is a classic deep thoughtful question that has bene on a few minds of people. any ways I like the over all twist to this poem and liked how well you painted this picture leaving us the viewers with questions to answer ourselves. anyw ays a brilliant well penned write all round and keep up the good work and good luck
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