suddenly yet again,
shadows fall on my white dreams,
i am losing you against my will,
stop the clocks i can not tick anymore.
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Feel incredibly personal, especially that last line. Very powerful.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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WOW!!!
Loved it -
Nice piece thanks for your entry!
xo
Cyb -
So many times, and so many people, it feels like love slips through our grasps, and tortures our very soul. This is a wonderful write, the imagery and emotion you expressed here, is stunning. Thankyou for entering my contest, and Good Luck!
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We whom are in the know need but few words to express that which is the truest of intent, suffice to step back and take it all in. Sometimes even Belzebub would be amazed if not saddened by such beauty as to make him second fiddle on that stage.
I like it, I like it so!
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To the point!
Wow!
This was short and,
To the point,
You got a very strong message across in only a few words,
Few can do that!
I applaud you!
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Very good
Short but to the point. A lot said. Thank you
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Wow! With being short you depicted alot of emotion in this piece. You did a fantastic job. Thank you for letting me and my other group members to read this. I'm sure they'd like it as much as what I do. Keep up the excellent work my poetic friend and God bless you always.
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The subconsious or psyche of the poet of this piece, I feel, tells me and all too obvious, the tick becomes tock, therefore revealing much more than tim e assumes. white dreams sometimes relate to a more sensual advance, almost rape like, and by the title, seems like they've not learnt the lesson from the first experience. Nice insightfulness.
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