I just want to kiss you,
hold you in my arms
and hug you,
break you down,
and giggle,
smile like an angel,
always and forever,
because when we're together,
stars are always brighter,
the night seems like a river,
flowing ecstacy.
I just want to hold you,
love you,
and cuddle you,
scare away the demons,
believe without a reason,
a catclysmic season,
of beauty and sophistication,
there's no more brazen,
lustful energy.
I just want to kiss you,
I just want to hug you,
I just want to hold you,
I just want to see you,
I just want to say...
I love you.
Author notes
yeah...i love my boyfriend....what can i say?
A contest entry
- Ultimate Love Poem Contest by SmokinHotWhiteTiger.
600 points, ended October 17, 2008, 21 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
love the darkness, breathe the cataclysmic self indulgence
Comments
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You may be a teen-ager, and the judge may be somewhat dismissive because of that, but there is play in love, even if you're well past teen age. This poem shows that really well. It was joyful to read and remember the play. I do think that you lapsed into cliche's in the last half of the first stanza. The other stanzas weren't so bad, but that first one was going great until you got past the giggling. I felt my heart sink as I read the rest of that verse, fearing that the rest of the poem would be love cliche's. I'm so glad it wasn't like that, but I'd really suggest you work on that first stanza.
"believe without a reason," This is my favorite line in the whole poem. This is called faith which goes right along with love. Really enjoyable poem. Thanks. celtic queen -
Thank You For Entering
I knew from the moment I read this poem where this poem was going and I was quite on the mark. I love how teens have certain wants and needs mainly female teenagers and anyw ays wlel how you just light up and react when you are with your loving boyfriend(s). any ways this poem just reminde dme so much of my past and it actually made me smile
a very rare thing to do. young puppy love innocence through out this poem makes it an attractive write. good work and good luck
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