baby, if i still had you
i would hold you.
every night i'ld whisper
"baby, your mommy does love you."
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- Twenty 20 #2 by Errant Panther.
460 points, ended October 5, 2008, 16 entries
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such a haunting sadness to this, quite a different take on the prompt to most, but powerful nonetheless.
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thank you
great write and thank you writing this. it is very simple yet gets the point across. generally when you look at what people write it is along the lines of "my dad beats me with a hammer everynight, thats why country music is in my heart" and its total rubbish when they rhyme and when they try to write without rhyme which is a lot harder and not everyone can pull it off you see stuff in the lines of " my love left me, loreal says i am worth it" kind of genuine rubbish
check out some of my work i have both type of writings. let me know if u like them
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