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My Dreams

I dream a dream of water clear

with forest dancing to winds melody

as birds sing songs to the flowers

and the flowers wave good day.

I sit in a glade

with horse at my side

watching the clear blue sky.

With a wolf as companion and horse as steed

I set off for distant land

to find a meaning of life in foreign lands.

To the desert dunes I travel

and see the unknown beauty

as a rat scuttles into den

and snakes hide under brush.

Into snow I trek

unseeing of the hare fleeing

from my wolf companion.

On into busy streets I wondered

where people were thick

and shops a plenty.

Through plains I ran

fleeing the lions

and avoiding the buzzards.

Then back to the glade

to rest all day

and wondering where to go

the next day.

Author notes

tweakermuffin
My inspiration is my dreams I travel all over in my own worlds and I could never put all of them into a poam.

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  • Gay-Militant
    October 4, 2008
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    nope, i tried but cannot read it. it hurts my eyes...
    you may want to fix that.


    • gaurwaith
      October 5, 2008
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      It must be the bg, I'll try another color but I cannot promise you'll be able to see it still.


  • new born
    October 4, 2008

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    Great! This captures the beauty of people, animals and nature coexisting wonderfully! The wording was great,a nd the imagery was a dream, but I would reccomend changing your font colors.

    • gaurwaith
      October 4, 2008
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      Ty for your thoughts and I have applied them.


      • new born
        October 5, 2008
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        Thank you very much. It's not that big a deal, I can see how the background (which is beautiful, by the way) could make any font color hard to read.


  • turtletacular
    October 4, 2008
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    read the dang rules fool!

    • gaurwaith
      October 4, 2008
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      aren't we picky -_- I am not a fool if you hate that's fine but I've done nothing to you.


  • nilav
    October 4, 2008

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    liked it with a very intriguing background....the words trying to capture the beauty of nature...nice poem

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