Sleep’s high tide ebbs,
dream fragments
glisten on the shore;
my footprints lead away
from fading mists...
Withdrawing waves,
adieu!
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Prompt: Moments In Time 20 words
In a list
A contest entry
- Twenty 20 #2 by Errant Panther.
460 points, ended October 5, 2008, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is just as I feel it, with better images! Sleep is like a wavy sea, which has hidden depths in dreams, a lovely metaphor maintained through the poem. The middle lines are exactly how I perceive my forgetfulness of seven or eight hours.
Congratulations for your silver trophy, this is a delightful little poem.
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Congrats on the Silver.
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great imagery and emotive expression in the given word limitation, brings attention to forgotten dreams or the chance to ponder the road not traversed.
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A word-limit can often concentrate the muse to such good effect!
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Sleep. A favorite moment in my time. This is a beautiful metaphor for the end of a dream.
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Oh, this is just great! So much imagination with just a few perfectly selected words. Wonderfully done! Good luck in the contest!
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