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Wild Horses

cat and feather became close
her mirror showed the signs


one kiss
one cuddle
one rub the wrong way


some said she was an angel
I knew better


and when she purred for me
I'd listen

 

but never fall too far

from heaven's gait

 

and while white horses

we'd rode in on stabilized

we waited and preyed

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Secret Visions by manips-of-artist2

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  • notorious gold member
    October 7, 2008
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    Congrats!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 6, 2008

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    I agree with Kiwi, the word play is fab! Love the picture this painted in my mind, great take! Thanks for entering and good luck


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 4, 2008

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    Oh yeah!! I love this... the slight abstract take almost... the word play is brill... "gait", "preyed" and just the general play of words...

    Super write!!


  • Nicolette gold member
    October 4, 2008

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    There is something about the title..."wild horses" that really paints pictures in my mind. Might be my own "wild horse nature", lol. Loved the word play here, especially in the last line. Well done!

    ~ Nicolette


  • notorious gold member
    October 3, 2008

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    Ahahahahahaha!
    This is so amusing, and you got it from the picture?

    "I knew better"
    This has to be my favorite line. It's simply put, and too hysterical. Love the line breaks in the entire poem as well.

    I love white horses.
    Ponies. <3



    Jessica


  • Cannonsfire
    October 3, 2008
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    Hmmm Sounds like this is one interesting ride??? C

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