The dream fades away,
leving pricles down my spine.
the dream was about a boy
he was mad at his mom,
giving her the cold shoulder
and purposly forgetting the mother's birthday
and when his mother dies,
he cant apologise.
The boy cried,
and cried,
and cried,
and it hurt like hell to watch.
So one day,
he went to the cemetary.
He looked for the tombstone,
on the top it sayed,
"before i die, i want my son to know how much i love him"
as the boy read this line,
he crumples into a heap and balled,
placing a single rose on her tombstone,
and then her ran away, half breathing half crying.
And just as he left,
words appeared on the tombstone that sayed,
"I love you, just as much as i always have."
A contest entry
- I've Been Thinking (ya I know thats scary) by kistoclou.
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Comments
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you don't realise how much you love something untill it's gone....Isn't that the line??
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good
hmm.. there were a few gramatical error (by which i mean a lot) but that's not that big of a deal. I'm not quite sure if the way you wrote this was done purposely or because ur a noob writer. It can go either way. (I'm thinking noo
but it was still intreging (ya i think i spelled that wrong) I think it could have been better, but it was still powerful.
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OMG
This is sooo sad! But I loved every line of it!
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in a way i have had this dream myself, sometimes i feel this way in real life, and if you think realy hard, you can feel the tears surface.
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