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second to second

tick-

perfect kiss
pupils dilate
blood rushes
skin gets flush
breath shallows
mind races
fingers fumble
passion grows

love

-tock

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  • cbsbecm88
    October 9, 2008

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    i really like this poem! i love the idea that all of that happend between the tick and the tock...very unique!


  • Mirthryl
    October 6, 2008

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    Great title. The style of the write, with its tersely chosen terms, rushes the reader from tick to tock, and gives additional depth to the title. Well done. Congrats on the bronze!


  • Errant Panther gold member
    October 5, 2008

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    unique styling and passionate expression makes this a true joy to read, lovely take on the prompt "russhes" has only one s though "rushes"


  • aboomer silver member
    October 4, 2008

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    Ah, that first second of 'spark'!
    I like how you set this out, in sequence.

    Great to see you back!!! Hope you are doing well!!


  • rainyday woman silver member
    October 3, 2008

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    My how time flys when your having fun (wink wink nudge nudge). If all of this takes place in the time it takes the clock to "tick-tock" just think what would happen in an hour let alone an eternity with a soul mate.

    Cheryl

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