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Virginity

But oh to call your name or hear you whisper mine
would kill me in layers of sweet misery and passion.

Be still, be still this trembling skin that burns to the touch
and makes me scream in delight… No! agony,
as your lips caress my neck, my breast, my aching hips,
and force my nails into your more than monstrous skin.

Every thought I hold is shouting, warning me to dash away,
but my eyes have closed and my head has thrown itself back
in attempts to slow the quickness of my breath.

Oh this unbearable want that’s grinding down my teeth!

I’m tripping in your wicked eyes, they force my lip to quiver
and send me rolling mad at the thought of submitting to your wiles.

And my mind will say a thousand times, to not give in to beasts,
but my body takes its hold on me and crushes all train of thought,
all sane reasoning, or words that hope to push such tortures away.

Your hands control my every move, my every moan and sigh,
while your mouth draws out the aches in me I never knew existed.

And those finely daggered teeth, that are proudly playing home
to your poisoned words and silver gleaming tongue,
will sink themselves so deep in me I might just die before the end.

…

Oh but what a death it’d be!

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... yes, well...

MelodiousDreaming
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  • individuality gold member
    June 4

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    i fancy an apple now! to sink my teeth deep into its - oh i can't, my teeth are on holiday. a good poem, made me think of vampires a little with all the teeth. i lost my virginity many days ago, (last week) but now i am a born again nigriv.


  • ForeverLastingComa
    December 4, 2008

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    This is a very nice piece, I could feel the passion and hear it screaming words at me. That's amazing. Made me giggle a bit also because that was my feeling when I lost mine lolz. My favorite lines were,

    "Be still, be still this trembling skin that burns to the touch
    and makes me scream in delight… No! agony,
    as your lips caress my neck, my breast, my aching hips,
    and force my nails into your more than monstrous skin"

    Awsome write. Thank You for entering and Good Luck.


  • JinSays gold member
    October 19, 2008

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    I’m tripping in your wicked eyes, they force my lip to quiver
    and send me rolling mad at the thought of submitting to your wiles.


    Ooooh, yes, those trippable eyes
    this is some kind of write you have here. there is much to be found between the lines.
    Beautiful work,
    Much love,
    jin


  • FaithNoMore
    October 13, 2008

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    Hahaha very cheeky, but you describe passion and sex so artistically it sounds sensual and beautiful. Great write.

  • saturate.
    October 5, 2008
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    Wow, this really moved me... so unashamed and awesome


  • Ken-Maverick
    October 4, 2008

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    Usually your words are quite enigmatic my friend but this i understood,
    what a write i say, lol
    Much enjoyed Confidante
    all the best
    Ken


  • sinner-
    October 3, 2008

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    this one is going to haunt me,only here can I read such words so mesmerizing, so taunting from you...


  • Grunts Girl gold member
    October 3, 2008
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    we always go for the bad boys
    lol

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