Brilliant skies ahead,
soak the softest heart,
Trapped in the fumes,
forever more.
Waiting for something special,
In her own virtual world
stay-
till love comes.
A contest entry
- Mm'kay. It's Free-verse Time :] by Sunkissed xo.
400 points, ended February 19, 68 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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A whole world of beauty encapsulated in two short stanzas. A real beauty, and an utter delight to read
Thanks for entering my contest
Summer Honey. ♥
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Wonderful
brevity is beautiful and expression priceless. Wonderfully written. Word choice perfection, wonderful job.
*Go with God* my friend,
Valerie
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Miki...such profound images come forth in this short write..."trapped in the fumes forevermore"..keep up with your vivid imagination.....you are doing well!
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Great work Miki!
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Beautiful
This poem is beautiful. The imagery was really good as well.
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The beauty of this is intoxicating, it captured my heart at once. I think its profound simplicity, coupled with the enchanting yet terribly woeful and emotive imagery, is what really did it for me. It is very powerful and moving, and to think, it's only four lines long! This poem shows your great skill Miki - it's very hard to convey such emotion and beauty in such a short piece of work! well done, bravo!!
xxx
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