Gentle drumming
drowns the sound
of silence...
This hollow empty space
a timeless void-
Caught in a shower
unawares
Yet still prepared
a smile escapes
And warms this huddle
of one.
Rivers form and stretch
and trickle down
nylon...
The world weeps sweetly
scented tears-
are they for me?
The pavement glistens
beneath street signs
as happy splashes by...
A bough breaks in heaven
soft tears give way
to spitting venom-
I look up,
through a sheer soaked memory;
and feel at one,
with the turbulent sky.
Author notes
Study in Black in White V ~the rain~
prompt is an image: Aleksei Pechnikov, the rain.
A contest entry
- Study in Black in White V ~the rain~ by JinSays.
850 points, ended October 12, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Meant stunning- wrote sensual hmmm..
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I love this. I love the flow. A list named "Bric-abrac" was irresistable enough. But damn- This is sensual. -How the hell did you get that out of an umbrella.
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The pavement glistens
beneath street signs
as happy splashes by...
Wow, there is so much here. Clean, clear imagery, very nice lines stacked one on top of the other in my mind, a very nice effect when reading poetry.
Thank you for this entry, I love it, I wish you the best, much love,
jin
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now to be able to get that from the pic is crazy! that is mad talent all the way. ur very good at imagery, and u can keep it up through ur entire write. thats amazing! most people falter u know?
ur a very humble person to write at such a high level. ur poems are just amazing, and i find myself taking notes lol. notes, not copying so no worries lol. again this is just an awesome write, to take something so meaningless (IMO) and make it so personal. do u not see the talent in this, this isnt something that everyone can do, i know i cant. well done!
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