Pirouettes of pristine palms
wage war with white sand
scattering the minute missiles
while bending the quiet giants.
Storm surges stir paradise
into a rough ravaged morass.
Respite forgotten
while decimation marches.
The eye of destruction
is never in the beholder's
vision.
Scattered beauty struggles
to rise on battered legs
yet sunrise brings a
faltering smile's promise.
Author notes
With great beauty comes uncertainty...The Bahamas while beautiful are also so very delicate..This is about the delicate balance that comes with a price...hurricanes can be devastating..I hope this is still within the parameters of the contest...my muse has been off...if it doesn't meet your qualifications I am truly sorry..it has been a great honor competing against all of you..Errant Panther...you have gathered a wonderfully talented bunch of writers that I have been doubly blessed to compete against...thank you...
so here is my attempt...
blessings to all
namaste..
vici377....r
A contest entry
- Tour De Monde - Stage 6 by Errant Panther.
300 points, ended October 7, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
honesty please...
Comments
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The imagery in this is just stunning
etched in my mind
like a beautiful painting.
I understand this is about the delicate balance
of nature, but it brought meaning to me of
a different kind . I love that about your writing
it is like that abstract song that means something different
to everyone-- the one everyone calls 'my song'
I hope that made sense
i'm tired.
Needless to say , I love this!!!
Thank you for sharing
~Pastel
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...scattered beauty struggles to rise on battered legs...
This image will stay with me for quite some time. Beautifully done. ~Pamela
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Thank you so much for stopping by to comment..
it always means so much to me when another writer notices...
blessings..
namaste..
r
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You have put forth both the beauty and the troubles that can surround the bahammas. a wonderful take on the prompt thanks for joining in.
Warm thoughts.
frozentearz -
Oh your imagery is just lovely and your words powerful of such a devistation that nature can bring! Excellent take on the prompt!!
I wish you all the best in the contest!
Linda
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very deep imagery to show the trouble that can come to paradise, this time in the form of the awesome forces of nature itself. these devasting hurricanes are quite common among the americas and surrounding isles.
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applause and good luck in the contest
moon2u
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well written best of luck
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Wow - this is a really interesting take on the prompt
I really like the wording and the images that this paints in my mind are wonderful! I wish you the best in the contest, I hope that this fits in with what was wanted too
Keep writing
Polly
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Well, I dunno if it meets the qualifications of the contest, but I think it's a beautiful piece that demonstrates exceptional imagery. I love the last stanza. Well done!
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