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Sorrow

He came to her with love undying
Promised her he was not lying

Love enough for two betrothing
Then he treated her with loathing

Could they make a life together
Or would he be this way forever

Bitter memories abounding
Hateful words of wrath still sounding

If he cared he would not beat her
With such ire he would not treat her

She felt she needed something more
Than what there seemed to be in store

She needed warmth and understanding
Not the abuse that he was handing

Through the years her love depleted
All her hopes and dreams defeated

If she stayed could she endure
More of what had come before

So she left but felt no glory
All she felt was guilt and worry

Though she tried with all her might
To keep his memory out of sight

Surrounding her like a curse
This raging guilt would not disperse

Would she ever be forgiven
Would her soul rise up to heaven

Or would she be sent down under
To the depths and cast asunder

But, maybe god would see her sorrow
And send her happiness the morrow

Author notes

I think this is similar to your Fairy Scarey Tail. I hope it is ok.

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  • Violent Glass
    June 21
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    this was beautifully written, thanx for sharing with me!


  • Mykeee
    November 28, 2008

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    I think this is fantastic. And others feel the same way I see. nice similarity. thanks for entering


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    November 20, 2008

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    Abuse is wrong and it is sick...the person who does such a thing has control issues and has to gain power over their victim...Nicely written and rhythm ...


  • Jaffa-
    November 19, 2008

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    I think it might be more of the 11th option
    Either way i really really liked it and thought the flow was great. The rhyme was absolutly amazing and the whole poem was awesome. Good luck in the contests xo


  • BloodyCrystalEmbers
    November 18, 2008

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    Sad piece,so many women go through this and a lot of them don't get away in time...It's so tragic...I think you described her pain well,and your rhyming scheme was amazing...i felt her pain you captured it well with great imagery and descriptive words...you clearly have talent...An Amazing write...


  • DolceVito gold member
    November 18, 2008
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    Moving, with excellent rhyme, flow and emotions.

    Vito


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    November 17, 2008

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    This is a very powerful poem...life changing poem...
    you hit it out of the ballpark with this write, the reality
    of so many, I call it the "silent grief"
    thankyou for your entry, and welcome to the top of the
    finalist list!
    ears/Seattle


  • NeverRegret
    November 16, 2008
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    Beautiful so heartfelt great write and
    good luck


  • sunoir
    November 12, 2008

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    heartrending write darkness of soul searching for a light


  • Dragonmind
    November 10, 2008

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    Ouch. Heart rendingly sorrowful. It made me cry. I really feel sad for the people who experience this. I'm sure that whatever they are, they do not deserve it. Nice rhyming scheme. The story was portrayed really well. Good work, and keep penning ^.^


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    October 13, 2008

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    Excellent rhyme!

    I love that shred of hope at the end. It's always nice to end a dark poem with just a little light.

    Unfortunately, this is a sad reality for too many people... I hope you will find happiness.

    Thank you for entering!

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