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view from the afternoon

he carved me a dream
putting into prospective

caution's
holy grail

careful to lay out a mirage
of truth ,  convey
desire
in immaculate detail
the reds of her lips
curling sin  ,
can this devil's advocate
do me in?

draw desire from the
left side of my brain

senses
tingling
underneath


.
i shouldn't be sleeping in

lucid dreams, anyone?

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  • Lowell Poe
    December 19, 2008
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    deserves more


  • Lowell Poe
    December 19, 2008

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    very wild lass...
    dreams have always fascinated me...
    ...mirage of truth....
    Love that line !
    Real nice write..
    enjoyed it..
    made your kind comment on mine
    valued so much more...
    you are very good lass..

    Bless you always,
    Lowell


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 10, 2008

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    i don't dream but this this is something to think about, the images and the revelation in the end that it is all a dream, love it, keep it flowing