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Solemn Brevity

The empty recesses of my mind
leave no room for sorrow;
notice me

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Credit: http://jbdesign.deviantart.com/art/Depression-98711228

The emptiness of the mind leads to an empty room

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  • daisybee
    October 9, 2008

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    Such dramatic effect with so few words; and the title really adds extra weight to the punch this write delivers. Good luck.


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    October 8, 2008

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    I saw this take on the prompt too, a longing to be seen by someone, anyone, well written here best to you in the contest


  • Malabu
    October 3, 2008

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    turnig inward where the light shines...outside ones self, who could not...

    notice.......you

    mal


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    October 3, 2008

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    Those final two words say so much!
    Amazing poem

    Best of luck


  • Tirrell
    October 3, 2008

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    Ahh the imagery here is in its breif expanse, I t seemas like a flash in the pan so to speak, and then is gone. Yet is a really nice use of title, leaving me satisfied.


  • michael thomas gold member
    October 3, 2008
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    I like your take.


  • ShelleyA gold member
    October 3, 2008

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    A good write and take on the picture prompt. Deep expression of emotion. Introspective and heartfelt. Good word choice, nice alliteration and assonance. Best wishes in the contest.

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