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Lost Christian

I seem to have forgotten the door
From a mourning cry rising up from the floor
Where hath thou gone
What hath thou done
Am I believed to have misunderstood
That I should betray the innocence

I’m not leaving out a sigh
I’ve not seen the living die
Thou shameful deed
Thou art lost at sea
And I’ve managed to find a little spark
From that light on the sill I thought had gone out

I may have stopped a heart from beating
Blood is on my hands, not fleeting
How doth thou live
When will thou give
I can’t think of any other reason
What you see is what you get

I know I sound like a heartless wretch
You said “I love you” and I said “fetch”
Until thy death
Thou will not forget
But I tell you now it’s not so bad
If only you weren’t so dependently faithful

I’m saved by grace and so forgiven
But forgiveness from you, has it risen
Thy heart tis true
Thy love tis few
But to forgive myself may take a little longer
For I’m not sure you’re satisfied with my happiness

I’m sadly sorry to say the least
And your tears have not yet ceased
My love for thee
Thy cannot see
I tell you although I’ve found another
You’re always there

Author notes

P u m p y k i n Not sure what this style is lol I just went with it and it sounded just right I wanted to incorporate some old-English-esque language without making it the entire poem; I still wanted to keep it fairly contemporary. I played around with the rhyming scheme and I liked this AA BB CD one. And this is what I came up with

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  • piccola silver member
    November 26, 2008

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    lots of emotions felt here. you let the reader in to a very private place which is sometimes hard to do. thank you for entering


  • Rhapsody
    November 20, 2008
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    WOW....i'm speechless, you're words are powerful.


  • Rogue
    October 16, 2008
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    Wow!

    This is a great poem. The ending was a little abrupt, but very well done. I liked this a lot.


  • humblpye gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    Yes...

    I can feel the emotions in this, they're all there...a mind in turmoil, sometimes the best way, is to let the mind and the heart get together, weigh up the pros and cons and see what comes out...writing is my way out, I listen to myself, it's like a 3 in 1 situation, we all get together and each one has its say, then we lay it out; expose it all to the wind...and let the chaff blow away, what's left I keep

    Fave lines:
    "And I've managed to find a little spark
    from that light on the sill I thought had gone out"

    keep your eye on that spark

    thanks for sharing
    John








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