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Solid Hue

Mimic the silence before performance, watertight
incentive flawed by dawning waves, in barriers held
the hearts ever desired flow over sands, purifying
a immunity from whores and vices, a solid hue carried
deep inside, sharks jealousy ravishes, so arrogant and rude
a flaw only known to their growling and bloating bite
sinful wayward killer whales strike, but love harpoons
purpose to reason, our waves intermingle with dominant power.

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  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    October 20, 2008

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    this is an extremely powerful poem that you've written. the imagery is not only vivid but deep as well. You did a Fantastic job with this prompt.

    good luck

    kat


  • Truetome
    October 17, 2008
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    powerful statement written here.


  • Tirrell
    October 3, 2008

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    I love the imagery of the sea, and the rolling tides will roll for eternity, this adds alot of depth to the stark imagery of this poem, and its circling life.
    A nice use of title, perfect I feel.