don't mind me i'm just losing my mind
i just wanted to say good bye one last time
see ya round this fucked up world
so ya can say, i once knew that girl....
before her mind was gone and she went nuts,
before she screamed i don't give a fuck
and blew her brain all over the wall
then you can think to yourself...maybe i should have called
could my voice have been enough to save her soul from its hellish fate?
or would my call have come too late?
but it doesn't matter at all, does it now?
cuz you'll never know...why...but you'll know how!
i'll go out of this world with one hell of a bang!
with a so long, and a fuck you to all the gang!
**BANG! SPLATTER....
A contest entry
- Dark Poetry Lovers by SmokinHotWhiteTiger.
600 points, ended October 15, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow, this was amazing. I really like how it was written. I feel like I can really connect with it.l
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Thank You For Entering
I love this write from you. this is absolutely want I wanted to read of a suicide quality write and yet this is a fantastic write. any ways love the over all depth quality and beauty to this write and well your word useage was superior and of great choice. any ways just a brilliant poem and good luck
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Certainly lots of raw emotions here. Very intense piece. I do think it would be better without the bang splatter at the end, but just MO Well penned, good luck
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