These hands cast shadows on the ceiling,
I want to reach out and touch you
but you’ve disappeared without a trace
into the cold, abandoned corridors of simplistic minds.
I crumble to the carpet and sigh at the sound of your name,
cause the torment of the season is on the tips of our tongues
and I can’t quite grasp the fact that you’re still not here.
(Delay… oh delay the ringing in my ears a moment longer
so I can focus on your face without squinting
or falling back into this 3 week long headache.)
Now I cringe at the constant change from night to day,
it stifles my breathing and burns my skin.
Gasp!
… once
… twice
… a thousand times
for some sort of sign that you’ve heard me here.
But why I even try’s a mystery,
when I look at the world and often wonder
how my voice could be heard
or my face could be seen
through the clusters of smog and disease,
or raspy coughing from our dying friends.
(Yet even MY heart falls hoarse from beating so long for you,
it slows and scatters itself among the stars,
to go out… fade out, with the simple flip of a switch.)
Oh damn these sarcastic notions
of chewing on wits of nails and pins!
I’m too inaccessible for the sake of sanity
…even the echoes from the other rooms go unnoted
and my hungers wont be through until I’m spent
…on you, on us, on life itself in all its self-sufficient beauty
of concubine twists and distracting fits of confusion.
~ on second thought…
my mind’s been shafted by flashing beacons
…I’m just some stranger with a spinning head
…don’t take my thoughts so seriously,
you’ll poke an eye out.
Author notes
Soooo, this is what my mind looks like when deprived of sleep.... and apparently sanity 
Comments and critique much appreciated
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WOW, now that's PURE feeling. i LOVED the opening, the whole thing is GREAT. i LOVE the way you use your words here. GREAT write.
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Wow, thank you so very much! I'm actually quite fond of this one, it's like it all just flooded out one night, and before I knew it there it was, pretty much raw emotion at the time I guess
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sometimes the best stuff is just flows out without stopping.
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you have a lot of clever phrases
i liked the prose feel to this too
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Thank you ^_^
Glad you enjoyed it
and thank you for the applause
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Well well well,
i thought your muse disapeared
but this write says otherwise,
What a write i must say.
Again you have penned a brilliant piece,
i kinda get whats going on in your mind now.
Excellently done
Ken
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It's a strange and scary place, my mind. Don't you think?
Haha, I find it completely wonderful that my seemingly nonsensical rantingness is found to be brilliant hahaha (and yes, I said "rantingness"... if it wasn't a word then, it is now ^_^)
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