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A Man On Fire

As the smoke
Billowed
And the flesh
Seared
A man on fire
Ran rampant
In the streets
Unnoticed and ignored
As the rest of us
Were stuck
In our corners
Losing the religion
Bathing in sin
And asking questions
Only the flaming man
Could answer
As he continued
On his way…

Author notes

sometimes, you need to walk in the flames and get burned.

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  • cre8tiv-writer
    October 7, 2008

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    I could smell the seared flesh of the burning man and see him running and looking but never being able to find help. That man could be any of us....great job!


  • XxYoru-OkamixX
    October 4, 2008
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    wow. that's a very interesting way of looking at the matter.


  • Emolover
    October 4, 2008
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    wow

    what exactly inspired you to write this?


    • andywontdie silver member
      October 4, 2008
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      honestly it was that expression,'They're on fire for Jesus' and the imagery just kinda poped into my head


  • Deathless1
    October 3, 2008

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    wow this blew me away, and i love the images it sheds light on.
    it made me think about the pinkfloyd album cover of the guy burning shaking another guys hand.

    this is one Great Write.


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 3, 2008

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    Wow, painful imagery! Love the metaphors here tho, very well done. Makes a great dark read

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