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Muriel

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Melancholic performance with a symphony of masquerade audience

Utopian winter blasted passion on stage of wine with seductive glance

Revealing rebelling what’s inside through soft anger and harshly dance

Invading memories in caves of time raging the soul effecting life’s prance

Extreme satisfaction merged with art, white sheets perfumed soapy France

Leaping in darkness spotted with light turning to become my passion & romance                                                      3:30pm

                                               2-0ctober-2008

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  • liveddog gold member
    May 3

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    Hi G.b.d.
    This poem demonstrates an interesting understanding of the woman Muriel, but in the end it revealed more about the writer's attitude towards Muriel: "turning to become my passion & romance." I felt sad reading these last few words and questioned the effective use of the title 'Muriel.' For me it is a misnomer!


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    April 16

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    lovely and well versed

    Tasha


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    February 27

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    this is absolutely beautiful. i thoroughly enjoyed the entire page, picture and form included. thank you for sharing this with me today. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie


  • The.poet.of.hearts
    February 27

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    Classical and real poetry EXIST> I can say by reading this one.
    you have done a 200 times JUSTICE with it
    you are really amazing
    i loved it

    http://allpoetry.com/group/show/We+Are+Against+Every+Blood+Traitor+of+Humanity

    bythe poet of hearts and beautiful words


  • liltulip gold member
    February 19
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    lovely!


  • background music
    October 13, 2008

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    wow!! this poem really reflects your feelings and thoughts well... a very inspiring and fitting picture. This poem has wonderful imagery it makes my mind swim with nice immages of romance but with a touch of reminance and maybe sadness. I enjoyed this read and I LOVE ACROSTICS I hope muriel appreciates this poem dedicated to her.


  • Erica Carnea
    October 12, 2008

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    i love this sort of poetry,, i wish i could do it,,
    great write!!
    love always
    erica carnea
    xxxx


  • storiesuntold gold member
    October 6, 2008
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    Very nice work here

    I love to read this typw of poetry excellent read indeed


  • Godless But Divine gold member
    October 6, 2008
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    Thank you

    I THANK YOU ALL for your marvelous comments, and I THANK YOU for sharing beauty with me, and specially I THANK MURIEL for inspiring me with her Beauty to pen charm...

  • Eusebius
    October 6, 2008

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    a most heartfelt piece for sure as it comes across written with real zest for its subject, giving us some insght into what lies beyond.... fine...


  • rollingzen
    October 6, 2008
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    w
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    d o n e





  • Vendelay
    October 6, 2008

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    I like this, it has this special feel about it. The first and the last line was the ones I liked best. Got me all melancholic..


  • moon2u
    October 6, 2008
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    ah yes, I can just hear a tango playing in the background
    I enjoyed this
    moon2u


  • georgie
    October 6, 2008

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    my mothers name tis muriel so i had to give this one a glance... it was beautiful and i hope its what shes found with her new fiancee,
    hugs,
    georgie,
    xxx


  • TorrentsandTornadoes
    October 6, 2008

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    Wow, this is nice. I especially like the third line, probably because of the alliteration. The arrangement is also very intriguing.


  • lunarlunacy
    October 6, 2008

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    whoever said "poetry is dead" needs to read that. Kudos! The language used and it's arrangement here is staggering. Well done.


  • Paloszoo gold member
    October 3, 2008

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    Excellent. The picture really adds a lot to this fabulous write. Choice vocabulary brings out the vivid imagery, and the flow is to die for. Well done.


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    October 3, 2008

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    Excellent

    A very fine write, and tribute. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    October 3, 2008

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    You did a very excellent job with this write!! You portrayed this write so well!! I love acrostics!! This is very well written you did a very beautiful job!! You have an excellent flow!! Awesome word choice!! You did an incredible job with this!! I love it!!


  • Alive4aLiving
    October 3, 2008

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    wow....just wow.....i love your poem, and it goes so well with the picture........you really can paint with words....i hope you write more like this.....very very nice


  • apropos
    October 3, 2008
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    clever write. very effective writing, poet.


  • blueyez
    October 3, 2008

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    I really like the words you chose to express this write! Very well penned!
    Peace and Love

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