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Galactic Rave

  Fractured.
  porcelain heart.
  Catch her.
  Before she starts.
 
  heart bleeds dawn
  through pores she cries
  dawn bleeds down
  like wind she sighs

  howls, spins
  in a galactic rave
  sheepish grin
  forgets her pain
 
  Neon dirty
  stars that shine
  she was pretty
  when planets align.

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Flotsam Jetsam
i like the addict one

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  • amaranthine lover gold member
    October 2, 2008
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    lovely imagery in this one my friend


  • endless-lover silver member
    October 2, 2008

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    Neon dirty
    stars that shine
    she was pretty


    simply loved it hun

    thanks much for entering i wish you all the best.
    take care and love bunches..

    vanna


  • movedon
    October 2, 2008

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    mmm very well written. i like the rhyme. and even more so the words you selected! amazing work once again

    mylee