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Whispers of Loves Greatest Gift....You

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Half baked beneath the sun
as nipples to nipples touch
sweetest lips enticing them
as they  tease the sands

eyes interlock & hands slide
movements become well  heated
rolling about, against the waves
passion coats the shore

moments of bliss unravel fast
as he's underneath and I up top
our shadows are dancing wildly now
when my rhythm rapidly increases

while the sun is heating the sands
and I am heating you
when the beams of light do fade
your fantasy will have been met

whispers of "I love you dear"
are now traveling along the sea

Author notes

Called for only 100 words of free verse im not a free verser...OH well. I Do try. And the poem had more to it and here is the poem in the "whole"

Whispers of Loves Greates Gift...You

Half baked beneath the sun
as nipples to nipples touch
sweetest lips enticing them
as they tease the sands

eyes interlock & hands slide
movements become well heated
rolling about, against the waves
passion coats the shore

moments of bliss unravel fast
as he's underneath and I up top
our shadows are dancing wildly now
when my rhythm rapidly increases

while the sun is heating the sands
and I am heating you
when the beams of light do fade
your fantasy will have been met

whispers of "I love you dear"
are now traveling along the sea
as echoes of passion ride the wind
our shadows kiss the night

heat slowly fades when night falls
and cool air now embraces us
as we lay after setting the sands on fire
watching the stars kiss the moon

our legs entwine and you hold me close
and we get lost in the moment marked now
no feeling can resemble what's felt right here
in the arms of love greatest gift....You.

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  • Griswold
    October 4, 2008

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    Beautifully written sweetheart, you do free verse just as well as rhyme honey. I'm the one who sucks at free verse. Love you baby...Scott


  • Swangrnv gold member
    October 3, 2008

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    Another

    Gem my friend, like you I truly perfer rhyme, but i've done free verse and I say though you may not think it..you write free verse very well my friend!


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    October 3, 2008

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    sensuous

    I was warmed through by the sensuality of this piece and the raw sexuality it exuded. Fantastic...I loved the whole piece...thanks for putting it in the author's notes so that I could finish it...the last line made my heart cry out for my husband's loving arms. Thank you for sharing this. -mandie-


  • The Drifter
    October 3, 2008

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    Such a fine desdription of an act of love. It is so complete from the beginning to the sweet end with passions woven within = Love.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 3, 2008

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    You aren't a free verser, but you are a poet, and when it comes down to it, you can write. Great loving stuff


  • delightfulmess silver member
    October 2, 2008

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    You such a sensual soul.
    Love this sensation auntie.

    This is one of my favorite pictures too.


    Love
    Messy


  • princessleejwctlvr2
    October 2, 2008

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    This is absolutely thrilling!! So sexy hot and sensual!! NoW I need a cold shower!! This is amazing!! Your words are so lovley and beautiful!! This is an awesome romantic piece!! I adore it!! I love it!! Your incredible!! I LOVE YOU BUNCHES!! Princess Jewel

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