& I should've known
I was setting myself up for a fall
when you tied the rope around my heart
& tugged with your aggressive arms,
unable to breathe
with tears brushing against my tonsils
searching for a place to settle among,
gritting my teeth
when you're doing all you can
to convince me to give in;
you've accomplished your goal,
I dug myself deeper
inside this apocryphal chase
so you don't have to pretend
to notice when I'm bent backwards
to feel more important than disgraced,
& you can take back your highfalutin intentions
that you've built up
to tear my boundaries down,
but I won't be patiently waiting
whenever it is you decide to care.
Criticized behind the glass [again]
& put on the shelf
when I'm not good enough for you,
so you can't sew me back together
with your fallacious needles
that grind into the layers of my skin,
& you can't dare break me down
more than I've been pushed to the ground
but it's okay
if you acclaim your twisted bliss.
Did I misread
the fine print that came along
with your attention
or maybe
I'm not the problem here;
maybe,
you're not as perfect
as the red flag reads.
♥
Author notes
Word inspired from: misinterpretations.
A contest entry
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450 points, ended October 27, 2008, 22 entries
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Comments
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What an ending
This was a great poem. You used emotions well to show one's pain in misinterpreting someone and their character
Very well penned sis
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Oh wow, this was great yo:D
~& I should've known
I was setting myself up for a fall
when you tied the rope around my heart& tugged with your aggressive arms~
Hahaha, WOWW. Definitely my favorite lines in this entire piece. I love the image you portrayed there of someone literally pulling so hard on your heart you simply fall over.
Criticized behind the glass [again]
& put on the shelf
when I'm not good enough for you,
so you can't sew me back together
with your fallacious needlesOhemgee, hoeith, suchhh power & intensity embedded between these lines. Again --imagery = lalaLOVE! It really brings out the depth && emotional unbalance of the poem.
~so you don't have to pretend
to notice when I'm bent backwards~Loved the bittersweet sarcasm right hurrr. Do I even need to mention IMAGERY = LOVE again? Lol :]]
~or maybe
I'm not the problem here;
maybe,
you're not as perfect
as the red flag reads.~ Oh god wowww, what a brilliant way to end this poem!! Simply perfect. You are a fantabulous writer, my dear, and Frank hearts you very much :]] <33333
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