was it you who knocked on my skin,
knocked my heart out of place,
and peeled apart the layers
to find out if I was still breathing?
I couldn’t tell.
because the ocean glare
was becoming a little bit,
too much.
- and I fell apart.
Author notes
so i actually like this 
hopefully you do to.
nice and short like you asked hahaa
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I like this too.
It kind of describes what I've gone through a lot recently. Nicely done! x -
ok wow!!!!!
this is amazing
it was just what i was looking for
and i think that you did an AMAZING job
thank you so much and good luck! -
I think this is one of my favorites by you.
it's absolutely gorgeous.
although I don't think you need the comma after "becoming" in the second last stanza.
also, you need a question mark after the first stanza
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