I don't mind waiting.
I've waited this long, haven't I?
And it's not my life;
It's your choice.
I don't mind being friends.
If neither of us is ready,
Maybe it's better this way.
It's your choice.
I don't mind your absence;
At least I know you'll come back.
But then again, I've learned
It's your choice.
I don't mind the truth,
But I wish you'd been the one to tell me.
I would've understood,
But it's your choice.
I don't mind what you want;
I care that much about you.
So long as you're happy,
It's your choice.
But I can't afford to lose you again,
I can understand that fear you have.
You know, I'd never hurt you that way;
It's just not in me to do it.
But it's your life.
It's your choice.
So you decide.
Author notes
You Decide- Fireflight
I've never heard this song nor looked up its lyrics, but the title was perfect.
A contest entry
- All We Feel Is Music To Me by AboveApathy.
450 points, ended October 8, 2008, 8 entries
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Does it flow well? Could you feel the emotion?
Comments
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I agree completely with Mooney. I like the recurring line and the emotion behind this poem. (although not the inspiration of the poem. If I'm guessing correctly)
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I like the recurring line "It's your choice". The reader is put in a very uncomfortable position, which is made all the more untenable by the line "But I wish you'd been the one to tell me." It feels so cold to me that it's as though I'm going through a break-up.
That's what I think you're trying to convey. You're fed up. Enough playing games with your heart. The reader has to decide whether to commit or not.
You've conveyed the emotion (or lack of it) very well. Congrats!
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i love this whole poem i can't pick a part that stands out more the the others, cause it fit so well together, to me that would mess it up, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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the first and third stanzas are grreat. i liked this poem a lot!
good luck and love,
Wesley [!!x!!]
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