I woke up today, and I looked for you
I stumbled blinded by the sun;
Out into the garden
I spoke nothing, I had less
I only knew that
You had left something
painfully wrong in my head
A beautiful imperfection;
A tiny mosaic of infinite heavens
an epic tragedy
Where, and when, I find you next
will be entirely up to me
And this time... It's personal.
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sun-rising-books.com/juno_s_peacock_1.html
Author notes
www.sun-rising-poetry.com/juno.htm
My first book has been published. This art is the cover.
This poem is my heart, and why I search for you inside
of everything.
Written January 24th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Good Morning by ionabus.
375 points, ended July 30, 2005, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Blown Away
You know Jeremi, as long as I have been reading your work, I have never read this one. I happened along it tonight because I was browsing your lists looking for something to read. I always love everything you do, don't alway get everything, but I always love it. I think after reading this tonight, it has to be my all time favorite. I don't know, something about it I just get, there is something I can feel in it.
Anna
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yeah course it was this one.
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I was longing to read this poem today and I'm at work and don't have the book obviously here.
Hope you are well. Take it out of the contest so I can promote it.
Lisa
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excellent
A very well done lay out on this great piece.
I really enjoyed reading this great talent.
I must move on to your author page and view more of your wonders awesome.
thank-you for sharing your poetry.
take-care always.
angel
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Great!
I think this is a poem you have to read at least twice to understand. I did and I loved it. You bring across deep feelings without getting too slushy or the poem becoming forced. Well done! -
A very interesting poem, with an intriquing title. I was expecting something from the Roman pantheon! This is a very reflective poem, and it has wonderful images throughout it. It fits the theme of the contest very well, I wish you luck on it! (and on your publication)
Susie -
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Interesting.
This is an interesting poem with good imagery. I enjoyed reading it, truly. Shancy. -
one of my all time favorite love poems
hope you are doing well .. think of your laughter. xxoo -
this is really good work i really like this piece this is really great i like this poem very well it was very well written and i just loved it and i look forward to reading more of your poetry
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Wow this is just amazing. I loved the line "I spoke nothing, I had less" it was perfect, and really so was the rest of the poem. Excellent job.
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since your publishing post yesterday, I meant to come back to your site to read this poem, but things got in the way and I didn't have the chance. I'm glad you featured it up tonight and I had the chance to read this...
it's a beautiful poem on which to base the theme of your first publication. you must be very proud, happy and relieved.
writing your first book of poetry, you'll be working your second one before it all even sinks in!!! betcha you already have half the poems written for the second book already though, right???
Jo -
very well written
Very interesting poem. I love the mosaic and the way the man reading the book has his shadow on the wall is really
COOL.
I read many things in this poem. Very unique style.
etherealforu
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Written like a pro. Great picture, even better poem. Creative, unique, and fun. Awesome job!
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This poem is interesting because it seems to me like you combine two styles. I mean, in the beginning and in the end it's more obvious, but in the middle you have some great imagery which I loved. I understand why this poem gave the title for your book - it seems the kind of piece that can be interpreted in many ways and nspire more poems.
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THis has a really nice flow, I think the first two lines are my favourite. You create a picture very well with your words. Well done.
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published!! im impressed. I like the structure of your poem too, it wasnt forced which means you werent writing it based on a frame, but flowy and to the point, no raving. I like it, congratulations on the book
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GREAT
wow congratiolations on your book your a really good poet you should keep writing poety i can only hope to be as good as you!
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Congratulations on the book! I was disappointed that your poem ended so abruptly, like a tease about a story that's worth hearing. Your imagery is strong and your word play is good. Keep up the good work!
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cool. a book. I will have to check this out. Excellent job on the poem above. And the picture is very interesting! i am intrigued...
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Thanks for entering this one.
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I'm not going to comment. Someone might get the wrong idea. But you know what I think anyway.
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A haven is no longer legitimate when you can't share it with anyone but your shadow.
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Well, it's a good investment in the sense that if you're a young writer, or an older unpublished writer, Juno's Peacock is a great book to study, as far as what it
takes to get a manuscript published these days of poetry, and I'm just not saying that, unfortunately. -
Teah, I think I will invest in the peacock...Congrats on your publishing...Many many mutherfuckin' more...
CHEERS!
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Great
I loved this write! Good job. -
Wow, awesome write. Keep up the great work.
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Wow! You published a book. That's really good. And your poetry is very good too. You're a true poet.
STAC
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Congrates on the book, you have a great cover, that ought to capture someone's attention for sure...
It did me..
Thanks for sharing, and all the best with penning more! 
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Still.
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beautiful!
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Interesting. Like a search for the ideal you have in your head. Just don't be like the peacock's in my yard:
So taken by his own likeness
he does not notice the peahen
meander past.
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Excellent cover you designed. The poem has the tone of Clint Eastwood in a way.... It's a make my day poem if I ever read one....
Good luck with your book. Sounds like things are going really well. Keep your head above water..... and your arse south of the wind... and you'll be fine..... best wishes.
Don -
hi you. needed to read this today .. hope all is well. happy thanksgiving.
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I agree with Lisa....I wish I'd written this fucking poem myself. Gorgeous piece!
Mary Ann -
Welcome back,
I was banned last week
For a three day. -
This is a great bit of writing, I enjoyed this immensely
david -
everytime i read this i fall more and more in love with it.
this piece is breathtaking.
N... -
this is a very nice poem! i like the flow and how the lines are divided up. keep up the good work and congratulations on ur publihshing.
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Wow this was really awesome! It was short but it was GREAT!
-April
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Go for it.
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I feel honored to have this poem in my contest, Very beautiful write, so simple and complex at the same time. I truly loved it, I will enjoy reading more of your work. I've been searching for a beautiful work that was worth painting on a canvas, this is up there. I would love to use this. Id need permission. *winnk*
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This struck me as being a sad, sort of yearning poem.. not quite desperate, but definitely longing. Left with something beautiful to remember, but alas, left. Excellent write here - one must read it several times.
lC (formerly SmutKitten) -
loved that line a mosaic of tiny heavens...very expressive and emotional and romantic
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Congratulations on the first book. Great poem here. Many blessings to you, and much success with your book.
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did i ever tell you i wish i wrote this fucking poem...
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Very beautiful love poem... you found an amazing way to say a lot in few words... seemed like an open thought to me. Also, the title was very well chosen. Good job.
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this is very interesting. i'd like to read your book, just from the poem and the author's comments, it just seems like it'd be very good. great write, keep up the good work. God bless and thanks for entering.
~Jessilynn11
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this is actually what i came here to see...we'll need to promote this again soon..
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came to look at the feathers. (but of course recited the words) that is what the street man was doing, balancing peacock feathers on his hands, nose, chin, fingers..i can do that with mine. it's fun. as long as i keep my eye on the eye and move with the feather.
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congratulations horus on getting your book published you deserve great success...the cover is fab and very eyecatching...i like this poem its a nice length i thought the last line was a bit sinister as though you were going to murder the one you loved for not loving you.but then thats just my paranoia showing..eeeh its dead good about you being published.emoticon roll of honour celebration
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Exquisite
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Absolutly Beautiful!
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Beautiful love poem, horus..in a way I relate, in a way I don't..this is obviously very personal TO someone..the way I relate is when I didn't know WHO i was looking for ..but knew he existed. Yah I'm a hopeless romantic..always have been, but also a firm believer in soul mates..and this poem reminds me of ..lonely nights on a pleather couch ..where I looked for him ..
And it paid off.
Side note ..the pic..did you make it in photoshop? Just wondering cuz there's a real simple way to depixelate the edges on the shadow just a bit without ruining the integrity of the picture. -
Lovely poem. Congratulations on your book!
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why does this haunt me?
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So I guess I'm getting 35% of the proceeds in royalties, but that sounds crappy, I want 40%.
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ravishing beauty lies on this page, still even after days of sitting here. only this poem needs its home - in a book that can be held and read in many different places and not just on a screen.
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sublime
sigh
i'm never leaving here, ever. they'll have to cart me away. i want to have this imprinted on my eyelids so it is the first thing i see in the morning and last thing i see at night. including your personal author's note. this is one of those pieces that so many of us wished we could have written and there you are bending down to share it with us so freely. -
nothing to say. *bookmarks* xx
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A beautiful and poignant piece horus.
Brilliant picture too...
I enjoyed very much
Ann -
there is something wrong inside my head, though, i would hardly call it beautiful, but it is an imperfection, the imperfection of losing him.
i love how you make each poem reach out to people, how, in someway i always feel like they're written for me, and how i know that others feel the same thing. (that you write for them), you have such a unique talent, you should be proud that you can reach out and touch so many people individually.
very nice hun, and congrats.
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Your heart is a myriad of colour my friend. You have a beautiful soul. I'd never tell you this on p/r but this is one of my personal favourites of yours (that and your father and one of your son - and the plains of africa......timeless.
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Nice work, both the poem and the picture.
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Bold, tight, taut
Clever title (bird of June). Clever artwork - yours? If it is yours, please accept my congratulations on such a fine piece - if not, then don't.
This is poignant angst and the kind of thing that will drive a man mad. People never understand that love isn't in the being or touching -- its in what you've got in your head. And if you've got a whole mosaic of "tiny infinite heavens", you're a goner...because if it doesn't work out, there ain't no way to get the sort of dream outta there except one piece at a time - a long, hot dirty dusty trail to ride and no company but the bottle.
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Wow...great imagery at the begining...and at the end it really spoke of you power over your own thoughts and controle of youself, plus the slience and biding time of your waiting...plus the igamery in it really shows the cover...you did a great job...keep it up
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