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I Dare You [To Move]

You're standing on the edge of the world,
Breathing in your last sweetened breaths,
Tonight you look so beautiful,
Even when you're on the verge of death.

In this cliche, so-called "normal world",
That you claim you never fit into,
I'm daring you to step away,
And fall into the arms you supposedly outgrew.

And I'm daring you,
To live your life the way you used to,
Where all you did was smile,
Saying, "I'll always love you".

But now the person I know is gone,
And I know they won't be here for long.

Can't you understand ?
That life wouldn't be the same,
If you weren't there by my side,
And I'd be the only one to blame.

And I'm daring you,
To live your life the way you used to,
Where all you did was smile,
Saying, "I'll always love you."

I can't tell you how long,
I've been meaning for these words to be said,
That if you ever left this world,
I'd rather be the one that's dead.

When I saw you standing on the edge,
I knew my heart would stop,
A tear ran down my face,
And the pain I felt was nonstop.

I knew it would be a second,
Before you began to fall,
My world was going to end,
I was going to lose it all.

So now I'm daring you to move,
With these words now said,
That I want you here with me,
And away from the edge.







Author notes

38. I Dare You To Move – Switchfoot

One of my favorite songs by them :] Sorry it's so long D: I didn't intend it to be that long ! I was debating while i was writing it if it should be a song or a poem, but i chose a song instead. Sorry it's late, too >.>

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  • miss-princess
    October 16, 2008

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    hi this is a totally different way to the way i interpreted the song. Good write though


    • just weak hands
      October 16, 2008
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      yeah i thought of it a whole different way. I was thinking more of the title than anything else.

      thanks for your comment :]