Caught in a whirlwind
of destruction,
She will never admit defeate.
For lies have foretold
her story.
Paying the price for playing
the Devil's advocate.
A modern day sleeping beauty
for in this twisted fairytail
She will never be free
As long as her eyes are
closed.
Author notes
--Freedom is only a mile away, all you have to do is reach for it.--
I hope this is abstract, i dont really know if this is or not being as i have never written abstract before.
But i tried for what its worth.
Picture credit found in Deviant art
Called "Modern Day Sleeping Beauty."
For contest
A contest entry
- Abstract Poetry #29 -Modern Day Sleeping Beauty- by The Cube.
500 points, ended October 9, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Good work. A comppelling entry for the contest. Thank you.
Spelled 'Defeat' wrong. Line 3. Don't worrry I don't count against grammer errors so long as I can read it. -
Sorry, you must enter a poem that has won a silver trphy. Maybe you can enter a different one. Nice poem though. Patty
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I liked it. It completely overshadowed my original thought. At first, I thought..."Oh another dark poem. So many, so many." But upon finishing it, I had a shit-eating grin. "She will never be free as long as her eyes are closed." is a powerful finish to a good write.
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Haha
Big grin
I meant for the ending to be a bit of twist.
Thank you for noticing it though.
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That was lovely dark and abstract!
YOu really write thru the layers with that third eye
of yours!
keep it up..it's so vivid and astounding to read!
ears/Seattle
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