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~Echoes of Life~



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(music enhanced)
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Abandoned and deserted,
only the faint echoes of life
reverberate within these walls.
Whispers of children, vaguely
coherent, have in time, melded
into oneness of being upon these
floors so worn by tiny feet.
Window sashes
hold the memory of young love,
staring through the now broken glass,
infatuated with love itself.
The fireplace
stones are embedded with
years of family gatherings
huddled by the hearth, not only
for warmth, but the sharing of
generations that created
implicit unity. Complete, from
an infant swaddled in a hand hewn
cradle, to an elder, seated in a
crafted rocker nestled close to
the glowing embers and
crackling fire.
On
the outside
resides only decay and decline,
where children once frolicked. A
family picnic was held under the shade
trees, as they sipped lemonade,. on a
sultry, hot summer's day.
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No one lives there anymore,
there is no one,.....
and
all that remains,
.....are.....
~echoes of life.~
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Author notes

Driving by old run down houses,..I often think to the day it was bustling with life. Every house has a story, if you stop to look and listen....

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  • SubKitten
    April 27

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    This was a very emotional and almost depressing write. The heavy emotion you entwined with this piece is a bit of a downer, but it works very well for this piece. The flow was very smooth, and overall, this is a wonderful work.


    • grandniem
      April 27
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      Thanks so much for your comment.

      Thank you!! I often see old empty houses and wonder about the life that was inside them (or outside) There is history, everywhere we look,..one just needs to see with the mind, not just the eyes. Tahnsk! Regards, Grandniem


  • Jfd
    February 3

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    you've given life to the pictures in your poem, very nicely done, I enjoyed this...thank you for taking the time to enter


  • Jersene gold member
    October 5, 2008

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    If only the walls could talk...imagine all the stories they could tell. Some houses go through many owners, some few, but they all hold memories to someone. I like the simplicity of this write. Enjoyed.


  • Heartless Angel
    October 4, 2008

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    oh my word. this was such a lovely poem. the title is a poem in it of itself. it takes something so ordinary, so every day that we seldom notice it and it turns abandoned houses into forsaken memories. I was taken away by this poem, and I think even without the music (what is the name of that song, by the way?) it would still echo beautifully. I wish you good luck in the contest and good luck on future projects. Wonderful, splendid, breath taking, fabulous job on this. Please treasure this poem. It is worthy of 100 applauses, but I can only give three.

    Blessings,
    Lillian

    • grandniem
      October 4, 2008
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      Thanks Lillian!!

      Thanks a bunch for the wonderful comments! The song is in the music section of the doing the poem, called "Our Lives Change," by tryad. I try to scan all the music for the right songs for each poem! The selection isn't that big,..but I usually can find something I like! Thank you so much, again, Hugs Grace


  • peregrin
    October 2, 2008
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    That is really well said.
    Great work!
    I really like this write!

    • grandniem
      October 2, 2008
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      Thank you!!

      Thanks for the great comments. I really like freewrite, althoiugh I do traditional too. I love this site, where I can add pics, background,..and I especially like to ad music that would fit the theme! Thanks again! Warm hugs, Grace

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