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Dungeon

Dungeon

By: The Red Cat Jazz of Love

 

 

Sitting, before the board up shack of my prisoner thoughts.

The drain of my ego, is shattered and a 9 mm Beretta

is camping out in the Taliban of Canaan to undo the canker worms

that sworn into secrecy saying

Ah… I can't see the face of my destiny despite I own it...Unknown.

I gave directions to the years and the days I will come down

in turmoil because the genes of curse is a blood line that

I have a loan on despite I inherited,

but I own it unknown. I flee on the run

to Vaasa but my credit card swiped the total of hypocrisy

putting me in chapters of macabre.

My face is ashamed of the name of The United States of America

because some where in the tribes of chaining my ancestor papa life

I lost by un given choice to know my roots despite I own it

Through this troubled life zone. The strength of my bones

can’t be called by 1411 information because my dungeon pain

Is unlisted. I walk as an emotional thrift sale zombie

closed in four womb walls of my own.

Because I can't see the face of my destiny despite I own it...Unknown.

 

 

Neo Soul Poetry Artist Side

Julia L. Clark

 

 

© Julia L. Clark Registration Number TXu-331-190, All rights reserved

 

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Dungeon

Exactly the ride my mind took
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Dungeon

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  • faderman1959
    July 24

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    The chains we place upon ourselves are the most cruel! The hardest to break free from also. Never imprison oneself from the possibilites of the future. Such a thought provoking poem my friend!


  • Floatational
    March 24

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    Everything in this poem is a cry out of passion speaking from the soul. Simply wonderful as you know you are, GOD bless.

  • Michael P gold member
    February 19
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    this is the type of poetry I seek out on the AP, you are gifted...peace


  • Hetha gold member
    February 16

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    Very strong, deeply emotional, and I loved how you closed it. This particular bit grabbed me and I found it well expressed: "The strength of my bones
    can’t be called by 1411 information because my dungeon pain Is unlisted. I walk as an emotional thrift sale zombie closed in four womb walls of my own."

    You are very talented. I can see why it won gold.

    ~Hetha


  • DreamEnigma
    February 6

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    I love your choice of wording, and the way you emote. Thank-you for sharing! I'm new on here, but I have added a few poems, if ya wanna read em. Take care talented lady!


  • dannyjay
    January 29

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    this write was really good. nice choice of words. when an artist makes me re-read their work, then they are worth my time. you are quite interesting
    keep it up


  • poeticweaver gold member
    November 29, 2008

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    Congrates On The Gold Sweet Soul!

    You ed this piece with your emotions and talent to express!
    Thanks for sharing you, much love and light.

    -Mushy.


  • jinglingjoy
    November 19, 2008

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    wow

    (once I really got into the flow of this) (at first uncomfortable as it was at first) I found myself pounding, in awe, flying, mezmerized by th playy of words, so powerfully matched together! there were so many places in the poem that I had to print it out to get the juice of it and re-chew the parts I found so alive. Here are a few:

    "my credit card swiped the total hypocrisy putting me in chapters of macabre."

    "I lost by un given choice to know my roots"

    "I walk as an emotional thrift sale zombie closed in four womb walls of my own."

    no wonder you won gold for this

    truely
    jingle

    (thanks for your comment on my lips poem (I changed it, do you think it still has the impact?)


  • darell
    October 4, 2008

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    Snap Snap Snap!

    TWO FUCK FINGERS IN THE AIR FOR THIS ONE.
    THIS SHIT STINKS SO MUTHAFUCKIN GOOD BABY.
    Forgive my crudeness but you really amaze me
    all the time. I told you that you can do whatever
    the fuck you want to do girlfriend.
    You have a brilliant mind dressed in drag
    cloaked in the streams of Ghetto fads.
    Sweet woman of my dreams your beauty and
    intelligent mind makes me scream.
    I LOVE YOU AND EVERYTHING YOU DO.
    Excellent Excellent Excellent!!


    • Mrs LadyEnthralling
      October 4, 2008
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      thank you baby this is like my total favorite
      i dont know where the thought came from Artist but
      i liked it and he must have loved it to give me gold
      thanks for your support its meanigful _ Jewels_

  • faderman1959
    October 3, 2008
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    The prison within! Such a deep and thought provoking poem my friend! You capture the inner turmoil perfectly. Well deserving of the gold!


  • cre8tiv-writer
    October 3, 2008

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    Very in-depth look at the inner darkness that resides in your mind...great job honey!!


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    October 3, 2008

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    Well a challenging task you attended while struggling to capture the destny..I appreciate your work my friend..a great attempt you did..well done...


  • Ms Sexy silver member
    October 2, 2008

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    deep thoughts ma deep thoughts. I read this twice so i could feel your words. Unknown is where is where it took you. i like this.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    October 2, 2008

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    WOW!

    Jewels! wow my friend, a dark deep ride into the
    shadows of your soul. What an excellent ride your mind took, it turned out an amazing piece of writing!


  • cep2008
    October 2, 2008
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    you all in my head

    that's is how i feel right now!

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