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This Painful Melody

I hear the song upon the breeze
It slips up with the mist
Chastising me, this painful tease
Why will it not desist?
Though I’ve done wrong, it’s been so long
Why is the pain, today as strong
Though I’ve done wrong
Though I’ve done wrong
Must I be victim to this song?

I hear the song upon the breeze
The stinging notes dig deep
Into my soul, my very heart
I sowed the pain they reap
I watched you go, I was too slow
I hesitated and I know
I watched you go
I watched you go
And loneliness began to grow

I hear the song upon the breeze
Here by the sea at dawn
From its torment there is no ease
How can I linger on?
You slipped away that rueful day
I should have begged you then to stay
You slipped away
You slipped away
now all I see is bleak and gray


Author notes

The song of the waves and wind on the beach on the Oregon coast where we used to go together.

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  • Denerica
    November 30, 2008

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    Wow

    I often need to express myself more alone by the ocean and it seems to echo what lonliness and pain of losing something or someone...again as usual I love it!


  • aparnaagarwal
    October 18, 2008
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    exellent


  • toomysterious
    October 11, 2008

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    Lovely lyrical and heart wrenching, the melody dances in the back of my mind. Lapping waters in Florida can do the same. Good luck in your contest.


  • petalblue2
    October 9, 2008

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    Oh...so remorseful and lovely. You have captured the despair of a deed done regretfully. Quite forlorn, but wonderful flow. Very nicely penned.


  • Quill
    October 9, 2008
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    Wonderfull write my talented friend,you capture so much wthin your words


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    October 6, 2008

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    I read this and hear the sorrow and regret in this melody carried by the wind. I hope your song will reach the destened heart and that your love call will not be left unanswered!

    LOVELY POETRY!

    All the best in the contest!

    Becks


  • Pisces rainbow
    October 3, 2008

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    a lovely verse sad but so beautiful
    straight from the soul
    well done my frient
    truly heartfelt
    God bless my friend...


  • Paloszoo gold member
    October 2, 2008

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    This is wonderful. I'd love to hear it play out to music! The words are well chosen and paint a poignant picture of sadness and loss. You've done well with this! I love it!

  • Gwenevere
    October 2, 2008

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    A yes, a very sad song indeed my friend.A chorus that has a habit of repeating itself when we ourselves feel low.It can be hard to forgive ourselves and move on, Ros

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