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Swept Away

Speckled spots on the floor
flakes of color brilliant and true
Once admired for beauty
making the room feel like home
Now scattered at my feet
to be swept away with my soul

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Prompt is: Chipped Paint

A contest entry

Struggling to find my muse lately :(

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  • mysticstorm gold member
    October 2, 2008

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    This is a creative and interesting view on the prompt...an aging room reminds me of aging life and the lost feelings we often begin to feel...nicely done...
    thank you for entering!
    mystic


    • buffsab99
      October 3, 2008
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      Thank you

      I feel the same way. Life being chipped away as we grow older.
      Thank you for your wonderful comment


  • Paloszoo gold member
    October 2, 2008

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    Very interesting take on the prompt. I really enjoyed the read. The picture reminded me of an ink blot :-) Great luck to you in the contest!


    • buffsab99
      October 3, 2008
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      Thank you

      Thank you so much for your wonderful comment. This was such an intresting prompt to work with