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The Vow

If you were Cinderella,
I would put the slippers upon your feet

If you were Sleeping Beauty,
I would wake you from your sleep

If you were Snow White,
I would save you from the witch

And as the princess you are,
More beautiful than a wish...

I will be your everything,
I will be your all.
I will give you wings to fly,
And I will catch you when you fall.

For you I will BEND reality;
For you I will BRAKE the law.

I will be the cure for your disease;
I will mend your broken heart.
I will heal your bloody wounds;
We will NEVER be apart.

My words will say what your eyes can't see,
For as you know,the eye can be deceived.

When your world crumbles,
I will stand.
Even if I DIE,
When they tell you I am gone;
Know that its a lie

For even though I'm not alive and breathing;
I will ALWAYS exist by your side

I will be your lover,
And you will be my LIFE.
And if you die I'll go with you,
For I will be the night.

Beautiful you are, and beautiful is your mind;
I will be you guardian, I will surround you with my wings
I will conquer fear, and WE will conquer time
Eternally your Archangel

A contest entry

Um...I know..it sucks, theres to much in it, the ending is awkward, and its a little overbearing. I just didn't want to take away anything, oh well, hope you like:{

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  • Yo-Yo
    December 12, 2008
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    i really like this one

    but quick question in line 14 shouldn't BRAKE be BREAK?? jw


    • ArchangelNovember
      December 15, 2008
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      You're right. I guess I get so caught up writing that I forget to check the spelling lol. Thank you

      • Yo-Yo
        December 15, 2008
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        hey no prob

        I didn't even notice it the first time and heck I do it all the time. I just wanted to point it out in case it slipped by, that's what this site is for right?


  • chilali
    October 19, 2008

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    Wow! This was beautiful! I can see why this won Gold! Well done. So beautiful. I cannot stress enough on that! Haha. Congratulations on the Gold


  • written-in-ink
    October 11, 2008

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    wow

    i love this
    i really do
    who ever you wrote this about is really lucky


    so amazing
    full of emotion
    and just
    idk
    i wish someone write soemthing like this for me!
    hahah

  • Yo-Yo
    October 6, 2008

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    WOW

    great job absolutely great I'm sitting in class crying right now lol that's how completely wonderful this poem is. just wow you better keep wirting that's all I can say.


  • luna-midnight gold member
    October 2, 2008

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    awww wow..this is amazing, abd beautiful and just awwww
    what prompt did you write for?
    and thanks so mch for entering, and take care
    Stephanie ♥

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