He was just a figment of my imagination.
A dream built up into something tangible.
Only, I could never quite grasp;
I Could never get close enough.
A dream built up into something tangible.
I always wanted more,
Thought he could be all those things.
And I'd reach out in want.
Only, I could never quite grasp.
My fingers brushed up against his sleeve,
As he turned away yet again.
He was always just there.
I could never get close enough.
He'd seem so close but be out of reach,
Just beyond my senses, floating in my unconscious,
He was just a figment of my imagination.
A contest entry
- fig(ure) it out by Nicolette.
2200 points, ended October 7, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I really enjoy the repitition in this poem, it really makes your point stand out. I keep wishing that she could finally just reach out and touch him. Brava!
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My understanding of your poem is tht you're wanting something, but it's out of your reach.. possibly your imagination? I'm guessing it was inspired by real thoughts/emotions. anwayys, i really liked it!
Good job.
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I Love this poem. It's one of the best. I love the way it's written. Great!!!!
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I can REALLY relate to this. Seriously. While I was reading it I kept thinking 'Wow, this could be about MY feelings, MY experiences.' And I always love it when that happens in my encounters with poetry. It just brings a whole new level to it.
Anyway, the imagery is great. You can really feel the longing and emotion in your words. Good job! -
I don't know what this "form" is called, with the repetition of the lines as you've done here, but it is very effective in intensifying the feeling of the poem. Each stanza makes us feel more strongly the sense of longing and loss, with the object of desire just out of reach. A very good read!
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I could never get close enough.
He'd seem so close but be out of reach,
Just beyond my senses, floating in my unconscious,
He was just a figment of my imagination.
Hmmm I know what this feels like, good work.
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Good write here
It twists the mind in such a muse a figment of ones imagination yet with such a lure of wanting it to be real
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I can feel the emotion in this write!! You did a truly amazing job with this piece!! Its very incredible!! I know how you feel!! You did a wonderful job portraying this piece excellent details and descriptions!! I love it!!
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Wow! So much emotion in this poem. I know how it feels, to just feel like he is there, but you just can't seem to grasp him and get him to stay. I love how you relate him to how he could possibly be everything you want, but sometimes their not. That is hard for a person.
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Yes it always seem like a imgination not a reality... nice to have read this one ....well pened
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This poem almost has a Villanelle-feel about it, almost. I think it's the repetition of the first and last line that made me think of that poetry form. I liked the way you've played with the word fig here and used "figment" - very nice creative touch there.
Yeah, we all have someone, something, some experience somewhere that reads like "i should've known" but then, Einstein said "imaginative is more important than knowledge"
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Nice work here. Thank you for this entry.
~ Nicolette
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i know that feeling... reaching until you almost fall over, just to brush against him. the repetitive lines add so much to accentuate that feeling of longing mixed with loss. good luck in the contest.
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