about her:
caught in the lightchase days
and moondog nights
that howl she let out of a different kind of song
filled with specks or spills
of alchohol and dreams of smoking
she'd collect bits of us
like discarded paperchased fortunes
& what of her hips
and hightailed cowboy boots
that sweet sashay of a riverboat queen
i miss her quips and quickfire lips
and eyelids that would somehow be able to close you in
into well rounded prose or a stanza or three
if there was a hanging tree
where distance and dreams are denied
then i'd pay my thirty pieces of silver
to the dirtdiggers and the brokenfingered robbers
just to say that judas had spoken my name
Author notes
some will know of her, many wont... but this is for Jess/Judas Denied
In a list
A contest entry
- A new spin on an old contest by Suzanne Dia.
1750 points, ended October 13, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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What a wonderful tribute you've written. The imagery is excellent. I do recall reading her poetry/stories quite some time ago. Thanks for sharing.
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I don't know who Jess is but your poem makes her sound pretty cool. The archetypal allusions were enjoyable. The last stanza was my favorite. The world needs more rebels.
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Superb Gilly! Loved the line 'I miss her quips and quickfire lips'
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no better measure of a loving tribute than a poem that shows with well rounded images the good nature of your friend and the soul of her art. -silverfish
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Just wanted to say congrats and muchly deserved!
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thank you Sol
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yes yes yes
thank you
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thank you
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love this.
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been absent a while
good to read you gilly my friend
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...'taberwiiitt!
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Gillian,
This poem is one of your very best. The whole mood is one of music and word sash-saying with such melodic beauty. Your diction of double nouns, complementing adjectives and adverbs is superb. I have always found that you do your best work when you get out of your psyche and describe someone or something around you. In all of your poems you approach the world in a balanced fashion. You do not have negative elements to discharge in your writing. Anger is not a theme in your poems. Because of this one fact, your poems are always enjoyable to read. Most all of your poems draw out other characters or scenes around you. When you write this way, you bring to us a refreshing view of reality both soft and brutal. Majestic work on this poem.
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thank you so much Michael, for your kind words and thoughtful critique
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I am one of the unfamiliar ones... but that doesn't stop me from seeing what a wonderful tribute you have crafted...
the whole write is wonderful!
Sol
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thankyou Sol
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ah yes I saw her pop on line the other day as well
a fitting tribute and well penned
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i missed seeing her on-line
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I love the sound of this. I felt like my head was swaying slightly as my eyes ran down the page, the flow is so lovely.
I have no idea who it's about but I'm sure she'll love it.
i miss her quips and quickfire lips
Love this line...and the rest.
Good to read you again...thinking of you.
xx
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thank you Lucy..
and i miss you too, lovely lady and thinking about future times too
love and happiness
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you know i never mentioned how incredibly impressed i am by your "daily series", the quantity and quality of the work is amazing...
this is no exception, very nicely done
al
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Al... your kind words always inspire me
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this is wonderful- i remember seeing this name when i first came onsite but i have no memory of interaction with her-
i feel like she is someone i would probably appreciate... because of this tribute..
wonderful
m
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thank you Miss Moo... Jess, is/was an interesting girl and always kept us on our toes
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What a marvelous tribute this is.
I've known a few sharpshooters in my time.
Bless 'em all.
Good luck in the contest, my Friend.
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blessings to you dear Wanda, with your kind heart and ways
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I have heard of her but I don't think I have ever read, but if this poem is a taster I 'm off there straight away. Particularly like the last stanza.
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she was like a rollercoaster ride
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eyelids that would somehow be able to close you in
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loved that line and it is so true of her writes
the last stanza... so powerful
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indeed
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ah ...judas,
yeah.. I remember, and this reminds me of her.. seems like a thousand years ago doesn't it?..
best of luck
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a million years i think... and thank you
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Made me smile ... I saw her name lit up the other day and was surprised. I remember she used to scare the shit out of me. She did. But her quote:
what i do when I'm not writing: I'm a creepy neighbor
AH. I always LOVED that.
Great to see this here for her. Though she'll probably grimace.
Lisa
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she probably will... but i hope it makes her smile if she does happen upon it
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yeah well you know her smile is a grimace.
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Such a poetic portrait you paint, she lives and breathes on the page.
Kudos.
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thankie ma'am
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I don't know her, but this is such a unique dedication poem, this has a wonderful rhythm to it, a pleasure to read
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thanks so much Tara
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