If hate were a deadly poison,
this world would end in suicide,
with animosity, ever-abundant
and ill intentions, oft applied.
Hate may be spawned in a heartbeat.
In time, it will fester and grow.
It emerges as a monster.
Toxic venom, to bestow.
Aversion, vile and contagious,
it spews its bitter assault.
Unremorseful, in its endeavors;
Detestation, to e'er exalt.
The accursed, reciprocating--
Reflecting its hate, as well.
The 'Monsters' vie within their arena
to the applause of the demons from hell.
Alas, the Hate is e'er abundant!
The evil potion in endless supply.
So, Malignant in its nature.
Thus, we wither alone to die!
Author notes
A contest entry
- Think Big, Say Little by daisybee.
425 points, ended October 8, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I know exactly how you feel there. This world is a rather cruel one, with quite evil intentions most often. 'It disapoints me really.
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First thing I'd love to mention here is that you have one hell of a picture up there
did you make this one yourself?
Now onto the poem: the flow is very well done, and the rhyme shows a lot of quality as well. I'm not really a rhymer myself, but I can appreciate the poems that have no pedestrian rhyme in it - like this one.
Very well done - thank you for entering!
Leander -
I love the word choice for your complete and total correctness about Hate. You should try personifying other traits or feelings with the same intensity you gave to this one.
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Excellent
Such a terrific creation for the image. so very deserving of the gold. Congratulations. -
I loved this poem-so dark, as hate is, you captured something really stunning here. Thank you.
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WOW--AWESOME
This has to be GOLD worthy---Great piece
Excellent in rhyme and nothing was forced at all.
Really good take on the Hate/Poison prompt.
VERY CREATIVE ---An Awesome piece
Good luck!
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Excellent
What a great creastion for the prompt. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest.
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thank you for entering this contest-I'll be back!
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