Plenty of women looking for fun.
Some play for keeps, others just think
its too perfect to see a man undone.
One played me for the money,
I didn’t have at all. Cute bunny
she had nails that turned to claws.
One wore spiked heels and black stockings,
widowed, had all the neighbors talking.
Playful little critter, wanted fanny whacking.
Tired of all the games, think I’ll get drunk, instead.
3:52 PM
Oct. 4, 2008
Alexandria, VA
Author notes
prompt: dangerous games and wicked women
Please tell me what you think, what it makes you feel, how you are moved.
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Funny
Oh wow it can be wicked out there...LOL This was a fun adult write.
Tired of all the games, think I'll get drunk, instead.
LOL
Wishing You Many Blessings,
Much Love,
Kelle Marie
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Sometimes all the extremes become passe.
Love, Tom B.
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wicked internal rhyme...I love the
entire poem, especially your drop-dead
ending Thank you so much, Tom, for
taking my prompt and creating a fun read.
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Feeling perverse after being shot up by Big Nurse. Would fly out of this cuck coo's nest but my therapist says I need the rest. Sometimes when I get home I need a to get rested from where I have gone.
Love, Tom B.
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Nice one here love the last line! We feel that way to sometimes
Tired of all the games, think I’ll get drunk, instead.
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The problem with players is the extent to which they think they are getting away with something. The miss out on how much touch is sacred and changes us for good or bad. The treat people like objects and I guess in the end I am old enough to know there are better ways to pass my time
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Treating people like objects?
How can touch change us for bad? Do you mean by treating someone like an object is "as if to own them as a thing" .Is this something you know is being done or have you ever been guilty of this? I do not think of people as players
Possibly other words would fit a christian viewpoint of unhealthy individuals. We should trust GOD WITH ALL OUR HEART,and try to be compassionate and understanding to those who suffer from complexities.Not say they are like zombies.... -
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People talk about and treat people like objects all the time. I.e. "I want him to be mine" to say this is to reduce someone to something you can own.
I am sure if you think about it you will see and hear people use language to express dealing with people like objects. At a major corporation I worked for sales help were called aprons. You don't have to respect an apron, care about an apron. To call them a sales person was to speak to there humanity, an apron is just an object to be used and disposed of.
It would be wonderful if we lived in a world where people devined the sacredness they are surrounded with, all the ways that God is manifested. Unfortunately, they don't. The deprive people of their humanity and use each other flagrantly and claim to be proud of doing it.
I have traveled much, been down streets I will not return to, learned where my center is. Life is rich, the world we have been gifted with full of lessons to be learned and many ways we can honor.
Love,
Tom B.
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good read and cool perspective. I enjoyed it
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What we demand from life is either insulation from it or a cold plunge into the reality. This was cold water to the face with a laugh.
Peace,
Tom B.
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You know Tom? All that stuff has to come off in the cold light of day. Reruns at least allow for sleep, and a cold beer always works wonders.
Spiked heels are hard to sleep in, and fishnets?
Yeah, okay. Whoever the idiot was who invented those, I hope all the women around him hanged him by them
Kidding.
I liked your write, Sir. There is seriousness here, but I think I'll stay away from that for now.
I hope you do well in this contest,
much love,
jin
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What delights the child is not what delights the adolescent. When we grow to mature adulthood we realize the games get in the way. Yes, we have our escapses, we have our dispair -- but, what we share with another does not have to live in that space. Humor often is the safest way to deal with the hardest truths.
Love, Tom B.
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LOL! Great capture of both images and feelings in such a few lines. I get the feeling, even if I'm not male!
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Sometimes sex doesn't matter as much as getting tired of reruns and broken promises.
Peace,
Tom B.
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very nice,short and funny. i liked line 10
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Thanks. I am glad I didn't fall flat on my face.
Peace,
Tom B.
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hahaha..this made me laugh too while i enjoyed it ....
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Humor keeps the smell of rotting vegetables away.
Peace,
Tom B.
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quick and dirty, like a one night stand, it still has the imagery and conciseness of all your work. the last line is genius!
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Addictions are easy to come by and being numb is no way to live. Still -- if you like playing in the highway, better to be out of it when the fast cars hit.
Thanks
Love, Tom B.
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This reminds me of some of the Las Vegas stories I've heard; dangerous women who could take your heart and wallet before you even knew it.
Very short but direct and gets the message across quite clearly
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I only got to do it in ten lines. I had about fifteen written. Glad you enjoyed by brief foray into dangerous games and wild women.
Love, Tom B.
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funny, but so true. we all have to have our fun and games some time in life.
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I remember playing. I found the results hollow and totally unsatisfying.
Love, Tom B.
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