My sweet old days
My sun shiny rays
My kite flying away
So I cry a bit and have an ice cream sundae
My little tiny feet, running all over the place
With the biggest smile I have on my face
When I’m young
I’m always pretty
All so cute and perhaps witty
No one do judge
Because I’m only a child
They give me fudge
Just not to go wild
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oh thx ... yea i know i kinda forced it but sometimes i don't feel its really a poem when it doesn't rhyme .. so i just squeeze my mind more and thats what comes out!
u know what i really like about this poem .. its simple! .. and its talking about childhood , which is also simple .. -
This is a good write, I very much enjoyed it. It brought me back to some old childhood memories of my own. You have great imagery in there as well. But i do think that you fourced the flow of the poem. Sometimes the words dont need to go together so much. but other wise great write.
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