Oh God
with all my restricted provisos
I test to correspondence you as sighing sometimes
sometimes when I am cheery
or, when I am exhausted or craved to exhaust
as a human being at all my twists
the subsistence of yours were always yearned
and you were always present at all my consequences
even if I meant for you
or not, you confirmed me that
there is no necessity to allure you
especially, when you were the influential behind
eventualities of my occurrence
Oh God...
Author notes
Prompt
"God is like love or the wind, beyond our comprehension, infinite enough to bear being worshiped in an infinite number of ways, merciful enough to not to care whether people pray to him in church or under a hedgerow, in Latin or English or Greek, crying or laughing."--Portrait of an Unknown Woman
A contest entry
- Quotes--love, war, racism, politics, and so much more. by Kelsey-Jo.
1100 points, ended October 20, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I found this write pleasant to read, the flow is nice and you have some great imgery. I like the concept it makes.. you also have a good understanding of what you are penning about!! Well done there poet!! Keep penning!
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I like this poem, in that it makes the concept and understanding of God and stretches it to a universal scale that any religion can relate to in its simplicity.
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Awesome
God is awesome
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I loved your poem!
To compare God to the wind was something lovely! Not seen but felt, so powerfull and so mercyfull! The picture you chose fits your poem so well. I love what you did with the contest prompt and to cry out like you did in this poem was very cleverly tought out!
Take care
Becks
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Liked the beginning and ending of "Oh God" which is a phrase said, as you said, in so many cirumstances - and even by those who are not religious, crying out without realising this.
You structured this well; it was both a thought provoking and enjoyabel read! Best wishes in the contest
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God is omnipresent...well done!
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even if I meant for you
or not, you confirmed me that
there is no necessity to allure you
These are genious lines, so hamble in this write you were and the greatness of God stick out so clear as well. Thanks for sharing such a beautiful piece!
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"Behind..."...amd before, and above and below..all about is the Presence...you have written truth and 'spoken' it with your voice as softly as a baby's sigh...Lovely. Best wishes in the contest. Peace, Rhonda
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You have
written a truth. He is in simplistic terms everywhere and while a God beyond our comprehension, His one characteristic is to stoop so low, as to be able to touch my heart. Your word choice, and the interplay between you / humans and God is noticeable. Best in the competiton. Frans
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"there is no necessity to allure you"-- exactly!
I was truly hoping someone would pick this one. It's a thinker. Nice view, thanks so much for sharing it!
Kelsey-J
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